Broken Heart Palace

Opening soon...

Broken Heart Palace

rooms will be cheap

entertainment....none

pool area dirty and green

no complimentary offerings

nothing of the Hilton scene

no nice desk clerks

no extra towels for two

ice machine broken

dirty sheets for you

pay as you go...

with broken dreams

no credit accepted

we choose who stays

Broken Heart Palace

is in the remodeling phase

Reviews

[sithlordjp]

beautiful words... Just love the openin line: "Opening soon..." Full of ominous despair... Gives the tone right away for what's about to follow... Well done!

[Holly Mason]

thank you for your kind words

[Tate Morgan]

broken hearts and lost dreams are the recipe of despair

[Holly Mason]

thank you much

[Inda]

This is fantastic! Love the play on words and the playfullness
Of this piece which deals greatly with heartache.
Great write!

[Holly Mason]

thanks for review

[Marie]

Sounds like "Heartbreat Hotel..." Elvis would have liked it...

[Chris]

This one left a very heavy aftertaste...

[Holly Mason]

need a mint?

[Chris]

I prefer Tootsie Roll Pops... Grape, though the sky blue ones are good too.

you're good enough that barring a typo you don't need a review... so I'm speaking of MY thoughts at reading yours aloud.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and yet the waiting list to get in will be quite long...

there are many traveling this route and in need of a place to stay...

and what do they get? worse than motel 6!

i feel this is a very clever piece, nice play on words.

[Holly Mason]

thank you much for some reason clever from you makes me happy!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if i did favs, this would be one.

[Sami Khalil]

This is a unique write in its own self. Brilliant ...:)

[SkinlessFrank]

i can smell that dirty dish rag smell

[Holly Mason]

and here I thought she went home already

[Whiskurz]

I think I've stayed there once or twice....Very creative my friend.....Whisk

[Holly Mason]

thank you let me know if you would like reservations hahah

[Indie Skreet]

Great poem Holly - and yes, as the above, have stayed there myself.