Broken Heart Palace

Opening soon...

Broken Heart Palace

rooms will be cheap

entertainment....none

pool area dirty and green

no complimentary offerings

nothing of the Hilton scene

no nice desk clerks

no extra towels for two

ice machine broken

dirty sheets for you

pay as you go...

with broken dreams

no credit accepted

we choose who stays

Broken Heart Palace

is in the remodeling phase

Reviews

[redflutterby]

I hear Hotel California playing in my ears...lol!! Love the images you've painted here with such precise strokes!! Great poem Holly... ;-)

[Holly Mason]

thank you fine lady

[Jack...]

But does the bed have "Magic Fingers?" I might think about it if it does. Funny my friend, though pretty damn close to accurately describing how a broken heart feels. One only hopes the flashing neon sign reads, "No Vacancy."

[Holly Mason]

well this was when I first got here-I was a playin away with metaphors*)
bring a roll of quarters ....and of course bug spray*)
thank you fine sir truly

[captain]

hmm.. a very hard place to be, I'll pass :)
nice write!

[Holly Mason]

thank you for reading

[Quattro Hall]

I love poems that have that since of describing what is in you mind as a real place people can grasp. very good job.

[Holly Mason]

thank you for reading and enjoying

[Enrico]

very good write. love this poem

[Holly Mason]

thank you very much

[Firestone Feinberg]

This is phenominal! what a creative and brilliant idea! so well expressed. completely natural and wonderfully wry. --david

[Holly Mason]

thank you David much appreciated

[Dr Ayaz chandio]

very well written,and it conveys the message hidden behind words.nice write.

[Holly Mason]

thank you much

[John]

I know the poem was not literal in meaning,
but it just reminded me of all the hotels I stayed at when I was young, always traveling, and there was just HAD something wrong at each location haha.
Kind of helped me gain perspective on the Broken Heart bit, I can relate my childhood experiences now to emotional experiences.
Very well done, your poem opened something up inside me that I forgot was there.

[Holly Mason]

thank you much...personal quote from me as a teen..
never stay in a hotel with a number for a name

[John]

haha I love it, alas, I fear I have already faulted on that one.
Many occasions over.

[hardluckbaby]

I have no words. I loved it!

[Pete Langley]

The aftermath of this smashing allegory is a confusing time - I well know . There is chaos in the remodeling that you have to make sense of.
I love this piece.

[Holly Mason]

hopefully the contractor that was hired can handle their stuff thank you for taking time to read