Chasing The Night

For you ma.

Her sweetest memories
Always come to me at dawn,
Dancing on that auric ribbon
Of ending night & beginning day

The creeping daylight
Invades the security of false hope
The night, o' the gentle night
Quietly fosters my selfish delusions

The harshness of light
Threatens to reveal obvious truth
And this brittle heart dares not
Face a single day... Without her

Seeking the comfort of darkness
I reject the approaching sunrise
Morning holds nothing I need...
Lest she has become the sun

Leave me to chase endless night
Blind to every coming tomorrow
Cemented to moonlight & shadows,
Petitioning heaven to give her back

Author's Note

Thank you for reading... I hope this reads well, it was a very difficult write for me. Appreciate those you love when you can, tomorrow is never promised.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Mothers are really special in all aspects of the word... selfless human beings indeed.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

That they are, thank you for your thoughts, friend.

[Sami Khalil]

:)................

[Oncebitten]

This is an amazing poem...among the best I've read. Keep writing!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I'm completely humbled by your thoughts, thank you.

[Kelly Scheppers]

The depths you go here are amazing. Incredible, impressionable, and at the same time, unlike anything I've ever read before!

...simply beautiful!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you... your thoughts have left me in awe. You have made this a true success of my efforts.

[Kelly Scheppers]

There were more than a few lines here that had a pulse for me. What a thrill it will be to read more of you!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I'm honored, and look forward to your thoughts.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked and I understood these words my friend.
"Seeking the comfort of darkness
I reject the approaching sunrise
Morning holds nothing I need...
Less she has become the sun "
The above lines. I wished for often in my life. Thank you Travis for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I'm glad to know my words are relatable... and as always, thanks for the wonderful review.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Eddie Phillips]

There is a nod to the classical in this poem. You write a sorrowful tale of love's absence. It is poetic and heartfelt. I was impressed with your choice of rhythm and pace. It was a great poem that really spoke to me on a emotional level. Great job on this.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Yes, there is an allusion to Dylan's great piece "Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night," Where he used the night as a metaphor for death, I attempted to use it much as the same, but also as a station the narrator is stuck in. Not dead, but not exactly living due to grief and loss. This was difficult write for me, but comments like this make it a success, thank you.

[Eddie Phillips]

The pleasure was all mine. It is a really good poem.

[Falanne Shanta]

I feel this on so many levels. I can relate so much to this. "The creeping daylight invades the security of false hope" That hit home.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, I'm glad you can relate to this piece on such a sincere level. Thank you for the kind review as well.

[Falanne Shanta]

You're absolutely welcome. Thank you for your words.

[MsJewel]

Your words drew me in and wrapped right around my heart. There is so much real emotion shared here - outstanding poetry. :) Julie

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you for your kind words, I'm pleased you found this affecting. It indeed was difficult to put in to words.

[costa siwale]

I read this twice, the first time I drifted into the intensity of it, the tragic picture you paint is incredible, terse! sharp! grey! gloom! my kind of poetry.
second time am reading this and it evokes the same emotions, the same kind of depth as before, that's what I call poetry.

well written piece friend, well written

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you... You're thoughts are humbling. You've secured this piece a success in my mind.

[apennylate]

*Welcome to "Pure Rhymes" Thanks for joining, great to have you...!*

That fourth verse... Reeks of seeking dark bliss... The uselessness of pining away at a gate without hope... Lost-love... Burdensome in the mightiest of capacities... Ouch...

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, for the warm welcome... I hope to be able to keep up. Thank you for the sincere review as well.

[apennylate]

Most welcome

[Sami Khalil]

Loss and sorrow mixed with openness and meaning... Your voice is heard and your prayers is answered. Your emotions are exceedingly touching with endurance. ...Excellent...:::))))

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you old friend... Your empowering thoughts are always appreciated.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. Any time....:::)))