Wish Me Away

Wanting to be where she was

On the whispering of repeated hopes
my desire has found itself adrift;
floating abandoned of direction
mid a dark salted with stars.

The foundation of my drive
was washed away in a flood
of my own failings, foolishly
I never stopped looking up.

Much too hopeful to see ground,
I roamed every starry night.
Hanging kaleidoscopic dreams
from every still star I found.

The crippling silence of lights, teaches
the breath of night secures no promises.
Winged feet learned to walk on ground,
and my traveling spirit found home.

A parting Sun speaks to me still;
night and those stars, call to me.
May one among them soothe this brooding soul,
and wish me away, back into her arms.

Author's Note

This wrote itself, one of those very late nights I was having. Thank you for reading.

Captcha: dreamlet (no kidding) lol

Reviews

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Much too hopeful to see ground,
I roamed every starry night.
Hanging kaleidoscopic dreams
from every still star I found."

This was a mesmerizing read and I fell right into the charm of it..
Those last 2 lines brought on a sigh from me..
Excellently portrayed emotions...

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you... Your review is humbling. I'm elated to know the emotion here reads so clearly.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome! It was a pleasure ☺

[Bright Ocean Star]

Poe, another great write. I love the astronomical metaphors and the "winged feet learned to walk on ground and my traveling spirit found home" is heart clenchingly beautiful. Thank you for sharing your undeniable craft with us. Beautiful imagery. 100/100

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so much for your always inspiring words!

[Coyote Poetry]

"The crippling silence of lights, teaches
the breath of night secures no promises.
Winged feet learned to walk on ground,
and my traveling spirit found home. "
I'm glad to see your poetry on the board. I like the above lines. The poem had no weakness. I could feel the need. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

And as always, good friend... Thanks for the excellent review.

[Dhaye]

Sweet dreaming. Isn't it in dreams that you could do anything and everything about love?
Nicely penned.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so much, Dhaye.

[kublakhan27]

It's not easy to write about stars without cliches creeping into the words, but you've offered up some really fresh and unique images here that truly speak to the soul and capture the reader's imagination. Love the star-salted darkness of the first stanza, and the hanging of kaleidoscopic dreams on those stars in the third. And the winged feet learning to walk on ground is especially striking, going against the traditional human tendency to want to fly by any means possible. Awesome piece, I really like this one :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks bro, this was one of those pieces I just was never sure about. Words such has yours have truly changed my thoughts and has given it life.

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure my friend :)

[Baby Ricochet]

" The crippling silence of lights" Great line. Good poem bro

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks, bro... as always, it's appreciated.

[Lyn Anderson]

dreamlet. Very apt, and very well penned.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks so much.

[MsJewel]

The longing in your words is quite powerful and the images you have created - though lonely - truly are beautiful.

:) Julie

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so very much, Julie.

[Shirlena]

I've been trying to read so many poems by request I don't get to the ones not requested :). I finally get a chance to read yours and it is Magnificent. I enjoy dreams that include the night sky used to metaphorically incorporate love and romance. Makes me all tingly.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I know exactly how that can be. Lol thank you for finding the time to read and review this piece. I'm glad you were able to enjoy it.

[Oyindamola Shoola]

this is lovely... I love the last stanza very much. thanks for sharing

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so very much.