Gated Perspectives

Another collaborate effort of Cassie and myself.

-Her Perspective

Briskly,
I walk along this smooth, dry road
That seems to have no end
Not even the scorching sun
Or the waft of adjacent trees
Seems to change the bearing
Of my trail of thoughts
I hasten my steps
Half walking, half running
Determined to reach that gate
And still...
My mind, body and soul
Is on you

-His Perspective

For too long,
This road has teased my feet
And that gate, where love
Promised its return...
Mocks my efforts
My waning heart suffers every step
These foolish hopeful feet take
Will my love again ever be
But a step away
Peering from beyond the fence
Shall this road
Prove to be my dusty end
The grave of this waiting heart
My love make your promise kept
Silence that ridiculing gate
And gift me your return

Author's Note

Thanks to Cassie for extending another offer to work with her wonderful pen. We hope you enjoy our efforts. Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[David Scott]

I can see this poem as an actual meeting of two lovers along the divisions of those protecting there boundaries. Yet it reads deeper as a allegory of prejudice or societal divisions. I like the simplicity an the ease of the read with layers upon layers to consider if we only care to look beyond the swing of the "gate".
Fantastic collaboration.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, for an awesome review... I have to credit any success this piece is to my partnering writer.

[TrimarcoRansome]

Bravo to you both! A wonderful perspective of waiting for your futures to unfold before you, we done you gel well together

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, it's success is owed to her.

[Rachelle]

........Lovely collaboration!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you.

[Shaquana Adams]

Collabs are a fun way to write and experiment. Great work :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Yes, they are... I thank Cassie for opening me up to them. Thank you for a lovely review.

[Shaquana Adams]

You're welcome :)

[Pryde Foltz]

My love make your promise kept
Silence that ridiculing gate
And gift me your return

Another great one, you two. It is all about perspective, isn't it.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

That it is... Thank you, Pryde I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Cassie]

Thank you Pryde

[Lydia Shutter]

The two of you really blend ink well. This is wonderful. I enjoyed seeing both perspectives of the same thing. So often we suffer from tunnel vision. Good work. Lydi**

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so very much, Lydia. She makes it easy to mold words with hers.

[Cassie]

Thank you Lydia, Travis I say them same about you too.

[Frieda P]

Oh Mars & Venus, you guys are rocking these collaborations. Great job to both of you!!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so much, Freida. Her spark of imagination is the facilitator, I'm happy to be along for the ride.

[Cassie]

Thank you Frieda, Travis..(smile) thank you for your time and for the honor

[Lyn Anderson]

This is an excellent division of perspective. It's should not have an apostrophe. And yes, because it's me, I not only noticed it, but was compelled to point it out. :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, your review is appreciated... I find no harm in having an error pointed out to me, errors help keep me human. Lol

[Cassie]

Thank you Goode

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes. definitely a partnership that appears to gel and produce very balanced and flowing free verse that is elegant and descriptive.

[Cassie]

Thank you John

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, John... your wonderful thoughts on our efforts are humbling and appreciated.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow you guys, this is incredible...

as a reader, i found myself cheering for the two to find each other again.

just enough, but not too much push on the reader to get engaged...

something like this could have us saying "so?"

but not this poem..we are pulling for both to meet on that road.

well done you two.

[Cassie]

Thank you so very much jacob

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Jacob it was yet again, another brilliant idea of hers.