The Overly Amazing Catch

For Gene, mourning you in celebration this year.

Three brothers stood, from eldest to least of age.
High noon made them antsy, hearts wanted to be uncaged.

Then from under a bush, perfectly timed, came a wandering hare;
A brief notion of want, lead to a grand brotherly dare.

Challenge accepted, the eldest took ready hands out of his pockets.
They locked eyes, he took a step and BOOM! they were off like rockets!

They zigged and zagged between tombstones, blurring as they moved.
The hare had blinding speed and a man on his tail with something to prove.

Now two brothers stood, the youngest with high hopes, the other simply amazed.
If the eldest catches the hare, the memory would last the rest of their days.

A caught hare punctuated an exceptional victory of man,
As did the golden stream of fear that flowed from his hands.

Author's Note

Thanks for reading. Special thanks to, Angi for sparking the idea that lead me to write this. She asked me to try my hand at "funny." Here it is... my older bro caught a rabbit in a cemetery when I was about twelve. This was my retelling of said event.

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

This is a wonderful poetic retelling.
They zigged and zagged between tombstones, blurring as they moved.
The hare had blinding speed and a man on his tail with something to prove.
really liked those lines.

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is sweet.Remembering the past shared with your brothers chasing a rabbit.Oh for simpler days:P

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, my bros did make those simpler days.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome:P

[Yellow Butterfly]

I loved this one Travis... you have yet again bowled me over with your poetic prowess which flows smoothly from your skilled pen. This was truly an endearing read, you had me hooked from the mere mention of the 3 brothers.. 3 brothers of which I have and your words reminded me of each of them.

You can never break a brothers bond.... even when there gone...

A poignant and wonderful poem...

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I can't thank you enough for such wonderful thoughts... its praise I'm not sure i deserve. I'm glad the piece was able to affect you in such a sincere way.

[Sami Khalil]

I think you can excel in story telling as you do with poems...Bravo on an enjoyable write...:)..................

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Sami... it may be something i experiment with in the future.

[Sami Khalil]

Good. You are welcome...:)....................

[Cassie]

I loved this story, thanx to Angi for sparkling out this idea, very well told

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it and yes, big thanks to Angi also.

[Rita L. Sev]

Travis, I can see the scene so vividly! What a great memory this is - who needs video when there are storytellers like you? The rhyme and rhythm add to the light mood here - Thank you for this smile tonight!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so much, Rita. I'm so glad to know it could make you smile. Having never written anything humorous, I had a lot of reservations about this one.

[annabellee]

Awsome description. Good story told in great poetry.
Enjoyed reading this :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks, Annabelle I'm glad you enjoyed it. Your wonderful review is greatly appreciated.

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

He killed a rabbit :(
really :(
I love animals :(
for that reason I didn't like this story.... but the bond between bothers was nice :)
I loved the rhyme scheme as well :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

No... he didn't kill it. He gave it to our little brother. My youngest brother said he wanted it, so my big bro ran and caught it. There's no death here at all. Sorry for scaring you a bit, I hope you can enjoy it now that we cleared that up. Thanks for your honest thoughts tho. ;)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Oh I got a bit confused lol... awww that's sweet then I like the story a lot more now :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Good to know. ;)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You set out the scene very well for a short piece of poetry and build the tension and moment well with your word choice. Easy rhyming felt natural and unforced. The humour of this scene speaks for itself.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks, John your thoughts are very much uplifting. I don't usually rhyme in my work, so when I do, there's always a little doubt somewhere. Thanks for leaving me with a wonderful review.

[Pryde Foltz]

I found this piece to poignant in its take on perspective: the three brothers and the poor little frightened hare. It was really wonderful short story.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was the closest I could get to funny. Lol