Snow Envy

Insomnia driven Haiku

Winter's diamonds flew
Settled in crystalline bliss
Peace I wish I knew

Author's Note

For Pryde. I hope my shot measures up... here's my product from the seed you planted. Big thanks to you. ;) thank you all for reading.

Reviews

[Kianna]

Dear Poetic Heroics,

Hello, how are you doing today? I had a little free time so I thought I might read some interesting pieces on the Cafe. This was the first item on my newsfeed so I thought I might take a look. I question the title after reading this haiku however the title "Snow Envy" seems like it would be better if it were titled "Envy of the Snow" or "My Envy for the Snow" because the words snow envy seem to give the snow the emotion of envy rather than the narrator, but that is just my opinion.

I like how you described the snow as "winter's diamonds." It gave the snow beauty and prestige, adding a tone of admiration. I like how subtly that admiration turns to envy which I thinknis a common thing in society. It gives a humanistic view to it besides the blunt idea of the desire for peace

I also like the last line because it males me think of how peaceful nature is because it is just so natural.

I say good job.

Sincerely Jazzsoulkeke,

God bless

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Hey, Jazzsoulkeke. First, I want to thank you for such a thoughtfully analytical review, don't get them enough around here. I toiled with the title, but felt the current one best described the subject and emotional tone, collectively. I'm glad you were able to enjoy the piece and sincerely thank you for leaving me with your honest thoughts.

[Rita L. Sev]

It would indeed be wonderful to know the peace of a falling snowflake... beautiful in its simplicity, unburdened by the troubles of Life... This is a beautiful haiku, Travis.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Rita I owe this to Pryde. Wanted to put a piece of me in it, comprehensively of course. I'm glad to know it came out so successfully.

[Baby Ricochet]

Good Haiku..............................

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks, bro.

[Shirlena]

You like snow? It's beautiful but I prefer sun but your words are intricately beautiful like snowflakes and I truly love those.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I actually despise snow. Lol wrote this after one of this year's first snow fall. Thank you for such lovely thoughts on this piece.

[Shirlena]

You are so welcomed.

[Yellow Butterfly]

As chaotic as the winter season can be... to me it's as simple and serene as this beautiful insomnia driven Haiku

Well penned

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, I wish I could share in your beautiful perspective of this season.

[Yellow Butterfly]

You do.... in your writing... :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, you're too kind.

[Rod Dangers]

I have just started playing around with Haiku's and this is a great example.
Really enjoyed this and look forward to reading more of your work.
Thanks for sharing

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks, bro short poetry isn't usually my thing, but I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. If you want some really great examples of haikus, it would be a disservice for me not to direct you to, "Pryde Foltz." She is a few comments down (if you don't know her that is). I'm looking forward to see what you come up with, be sure to send some R/R.

[Renée]

Lovely Haiku ! Wispy and soft..must be powder snowflakes

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Renee. It's great hearing from you. I hope the New Year has been well to you thus far. They indeed were the powdery snowflakes. ;)

[Renée]

Cheers Travis to the new year ! ( :

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Indeed, cheers!

[Rose Diamond]

That was the best way I've ever heard someone describe a snowflake, and it's also the best haiku I've heard in quite a while! I absolutely love this!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Rosie you always leave me smiling after reading your thoughts.

[Pryde Foltz]

Pretty awesome haiku …. first time up to bat and out of the park. I count at least four layers to this and the imagery is superb.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks, Pryde this is actually my 2nd or 3rd Haiku. I'm glad I didn't strike out though. Lol short poetry is not my strong point.

[Pryde Foltz]

I think you got it but go with your passion.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks, I'm sure my pen will find itself on this road again.

[icelandicblue]

It really is beautiful. Love the title and the imagery. The part I enjoyed the most was that contemplative piece at the end.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, you always leave me humbled and so very glad to have shared my work with you.