After The Fall

My take on Adam's love for Eve... a celebration of women.

My dearest Eve...

Though our father has shunned us, and banished our feet

from the soft grasses of paradise. I will not leave you,

nor should you leave me. While I regret our disobedience,

I carry burden so heavy, for I had never seen you 

more beautiful till that vile fruit passed imprudent lips.

In an instant, your image became incomparably radiant,

all shade fled from your spot. Every sense loaned to me

darted toward you. I knew then why he caused me to sleep

whilst making you, even the exquisite rose envies such craftsmanship

and would surely call itself an onion should it be compared.

He pulled me from dust and you from me, your seat  

must sit nearer to his divinity than my own. 

Would he curse this flesh further, should this heart fashion

a smile after the whispering serpent found success on wavering ears?

What of that forbidden fruit? should my tongue remember it bitter,

should it felt of fire to my hand? Do I deny it's reveled truths? 

The splendor of your beauty eclipses even that of the Eden 

we shall never know again, only the heavens know a height beyond yours.

This damned soil and tainted mortal parts are all I can lay upon your feet.

Find them worth keeping and I shall spill of song so true,

the most dutiful angels will cease their actions and point an ear towards you.

Let us find shelter within these trees, and build a home within our hearts.

Author's Note

Thank you for reading. This is not religious propaganda of any kind.

Reviews

[Angel of Chaos]

I read this, and had to read it again. Your words have me captivated. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you for relaying those wonderful thoughts to me, they always make it easy for me to share my work in this space.

[Angel of Chaos]

The more I read your words, (and a few others') the more I am driven to put down my pen and leave the writing to true artists and keep mine left in a diary. I am saying this as a compliment. I know I could never truly compare to your beautiful words.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

While I am honored by such a sincere compliment, I am troubled to hear you speak of not continuing to share your work. This is a great place for growth. Speaking honestly, I have no formal writing education beyond the 9th grade, nor am i an established published writer. I write from the heart and refine it with the art form in mind. That's how a true writer grows. Listen to your heart and let your pen follow, everything else is a learning experience.

[redflutterby]

Such an exquisite vision of the age old story...one wonders what Adams thoughts were after the fall from grace. Your pen has spoken for him in words beyond compare. What else can I say...I'm honored just to read this.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Red. I'm elated to receive such inspiring words, it truly is rewarding.

[icelandicblue]

Ok- this is beyond beautiful. You've created something gorgeous from the frailties of our mortality and imperfections. The glow of knowing we are part of each other and our time is limited only makes the bond more intense, and in your words radiant. Eden may have been heavenly but the fall, I think, was sublime. This is totally exquisite and retells the story from the point of view of love and appreciation borne of temptation and fire.

He pulled me from dust and you from me, your seat
must sit nearer to his divinity than my own.
Would he curse this flesh further, should this heart fashion
a smile after the whispering serpent found success on wavering ears?
What of that forbidden fruit? should my tongue remember it bitter,
should it felt of fire to my hand? Do I deny it's reveled truths?

Seriously, one of the best sigh-worthy poems I have read.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

You have truly left me at a lost for words. Your thoughts always make me feel accomplished, these are no exception. My pen hand is dancing right now, thank you! ;)

[icelandicblue]

Your pen danced across this page with this most elegant poem.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, I wasn't sure of the structure of this piece. You've nullified that worry.

[Karen]

Incredible how "human" this poem seems; no pretenses or "religious propaganda of any kind," just a purity of the senses and emotions that seems to contradict the Biblical perspective without the blatancy and offense that may cause controversy and dissent. It's a man, the very first man, who has given up his perfection, not for a taste of a fruit on a tree, but for a taste of the women given to him by God Himself. It's clarifying part of God's curse that their eyes would be opened, but what the man sees is beautiful and he is smitten by her. This poem is so beautiful because sometimes our eyes need to be opened to others even as we're damning ourselves by doing it. Beautiful poem!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Karen, I thank you so very much for relaying those wonderful thoughts. You have accurately captured the intent of my words in this piece. You've given this piece true life, and I can't thank you enough.

[Sami Khalil]

Ashes to ashes , dust to dust , love to hurt , love to healing . The cycle goes on and on. You have put all in a great perspective and shed light on Eden...Bravo...............

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Sami... your thoughts and visit humble me still.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)...........

[Rose Diamond]

So beautiful! The word choice was perfect, it was very smooth and flowed nicely, and the theme was something I had never seen before. I absolutely adore this poem, and it has very easily become one of my favourites!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so very much, Rosie. I wanted to try a different approach, and you have made it worth the effort!