After The Fall

My take on Adam's love for Eve... a celebration of women.

My dearest Eve...

Though our father has shunned us, and banished our feet

from the soft grasses of paradise. I will not leave you,

nor should you leave me. While I regret our disobedience,

I carry burden so heavy, for I had never seen you 

more beautiful till that vile fruit passed imprudent lips.

In an instant, your image became incomparably radiant,

all shade fled from your spot. Every sense loaned to me

darted toward you. I knew then why he caused me to sleep

whilst making you, even the exquisite rose envies such craftsmanship

and would surely call itself an onion should it be compared.

He pulled me from dust and you from me, your seat  

must sit nearer to his divinity than my own. 

Would he curse this flesh further, should this heart fashion

a smile after the whispering serpent found success on wavering ears?

What of that forbidden fruit? should my tongue remember it bitter,

should it felt of fire to my hand? Do I deny it's reveled truths? 

The splendor of your beauty eclipses even that of the Eden 

we shall never know again, only the heavens know a height beyond yours.

This damned soil and tainted mortal parts are all I can lay upon your feet.

Find them worth keeping and I shall spill of song so true,

the most dutiful angels will cease their actions and point an ear towards you.

Let us find shelter within these trees, and build a home within our hearts.

Author's Note

Thank you for reading. This is not religious propaganda of any kind.

Reviews

[Echoes of Eros]

In heaven and hell, love clings and fights and hopes. Here you've given us glimpses of that first love that wandered from paradise yet still found passion. Teach us all to plant gardens of paradise in our hearts.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

That they did, I hope the glimpses I've given are adequate. Thank you, for your wonderful review.

[Pryde Foltz]

You have created a very rich literary piece. So much meaning. Bravo.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Pryde those thoughts mean a lot me.

[Rachelle]

Words of love, encouragement and bravery from one who has been banished and yet, still much loved.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you... due to the banishment, most of us forget how much they loved one another. I wanted to represent that in this piece.

[Lyn Anderson]

This poem has an historical feel, like Keats or Yates - very well done. Wondering if it would not sound better to add an "a" to the line I carry burden so heavy?

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you... I can't explain how humbled I am by the very mention of my work in the same breath as those greats! I actually toiled with that myself, but decided it sounded a bit more classical sans the "a."

[Rita L. Sev]

This is a completely gorgeous poem, Travis... Your final line brought tears.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you... I'm stunned and honored that it struck such a cord with you, Rita.

[annabellee]

wow, just wow. I just loved it. Absolutley beautiful, had to read it twice. your words really got me :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you beyond any words I could offer you.

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is beyond lovely.Your words have left me enthralled in their grasp!!!!I really like this:)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so very much, I'm elated my words have reached a new face. I look forward to reciprocating the gesture.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome and so do I:)

[Cassie]

wow!!!!! this is so extremely beautiful, reminds me of the poem I wrote eve..will send you an RR. Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, your words are so very humbling. I'm anxious to read your piece.

[Angi]

Travis, this piece is so vulnerable and beautiful. I see the nakedness here and the offering of his whole self to her. Even if she were to turn away from him, he has bared all to her. Even as Eden has been dimmed and blurred, her radiance has bloomed, flaring. I love the way you write and I love to see they way your mind works. This is just lovely. Angi~

PS: The first line should be shunned, not shun.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Angi as always I feel like such a poet after reading your thoughts. I can't be more humbled than I am this very moment. I hope you've been doing well on your end.

And, I'm on my way to wipe out that error, thanks for catching it.

[Laura Harrison]

This is such an original and creative piece. Your beautiful words have captivated me.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, I am without any better words to express my gratitude.