After The Fall

My take on Adam's love for Eve... a celebration of women.

My dearest Eve...

Though our father has shunned us, and banished our feet

from the soft grasses of paradise. I will not leave you,

nor should you leave me. While I regret our disobedience,

I carry burden so heavy, for I had never seen you 

more beautiful till that vile fruit passed imprudent lips.

In an instant, your image became incomparably radiant,

all shade fled from your spot. Every sense loaned to me

darted toward you. I knew then why he caused me to sleep

whilst making you, even the exquisite rose envies such craftsmanship

and would surely call itself an onion should it be compared.

He pulled me from dust and you from me, your seat  

must sit nearer to his divinity than my own. 

Would he curse this flesh further, should this heart fashion

a smile after the whispering serpent found success on wavering ears?

What of that forbidden fruit? should my tongue remember it bitter,

should it felt of fire to my hand? Do I deny it's reveled truths? 

The splendor of your beauty eclipses even that of the Eden 

we shall never know again, only the heavens know a height beyond yours.

This damned soil and tainted mortal parts are all I can lay upon your feet.

Find them worth keeping and I shall spill of song so true,

the most dutiful angels will cease their actions and point an ear towards you.

Let us find shelter within these trees, and build a home within our hearts.

Author's Note

Thank you for reading. This is not religious propaganda of any kind.

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

BANG! Right between the eyes! This poem got me. I am a Christian - I do study my Bible - try to learn and I try to put into practice what I learn. the treatment of Eve has always been a sore spot for me -just putting that out there - so I started into this poem with perhaps an attitude? AND WOW. Totally lost it as I read. This is a beautiful poem indicative of how I believe it must have been between the two of them. And even taking the poem at face value with no belief system it is still such a lovely treatment of the story and unusual - this one is going in my favorites. Well done.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so much for such an honest review. I was a bit hesitant crafting this piece, due to not being a very "religious" man. I'm glad my thoughts were able to communicate without insult. I'm very pleased you enjoyed this.

[KaylasPoetryBook]

This piece totally consumed me. Beautiful! So glad you shared this :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, it's always a pleasure to have you visit. I'm glad it was able to have such an affect.

[Shaquana Adams]

What of that forbidden fruit? should my tongue remember it bitter,
should it felt of fire to my hand? Do I deny it's reveled truths?

I never thought of Adam's thoughts quite like this. It's very passionate and loving. Thanks for sharing :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you for the lovely review.

[MoriartyMesa]

Forgive me for my mind going to this https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8oUuu_bUxtU


But it fits

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

No need to apologize, we can't control what our minds relate to what we see. Thanks for the review.

[Lydia Shutter]

Overwhelmingly romantic ode to Eve and all she stood for. Gentle and tender adoration expressed from the heart. Gorgeous. Lydi**

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so much for a review that uplifting.

[Peter H]

excellent rendition of a tale , it captures the feelings the actual story could never capture it's captivating and i love how it flows :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Peter. I appreciate your great review as well as your visit.

[Tom]

'And so it came to pass'...indeed man's physical desire and love for his lady far outweighs his tainted conscious !

A profound, passionate poem, penned with platonic aplomb !

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Tom. Your thoughts humble me.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Fantastic, PH! I give your poem an A+ (I had to read Milton in college and remember being bored, and your poem did not bore me at all! Maybe it's the fact that I was just a kid then, but I really like your version of the story.)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

The title is an allusion to Milton's work. I can't express how humbled I am by your thoughts. Words such as yours has made this a a success and completely worth the effort. Thank you, Joyce.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. A beautiful and powerful journey into your words and thoughts. The good description allowed the reader to fall into the strong description. The woman Eve is mystery and beauty. Always allowed the story to come alive. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Coyote. As always, your great thoughts are completely uplifting.

[Solilokiss]

I love your style of literature and topic!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so very much. Being I tend to use varying styles, I do hope my work continues to suit you. I look forward to delving into your work as well.

[Solilokiss]

You're most welcome. I look forward to reading you as well!