Crudelis Cupid

Love can be so unkind

again, this hallowed heart dare to stray

for a bliss left in the dustings of yesterday

Cupid's arrows, themselves, know love by no name

driven by taut string, callow hands, and an impetuous aim

a stricken heart is all too easily romanced

and the wretched step to a fleeting dance

from bow, through arrow, i curse love foul, by any other name

Author's Note

Not sure about this one. It's been in my notebook for a while, decided to post it. Your honest critique is welcome, thank you for reading.

Reviews

[icelandicblue]

I like this very much. It has such a Shakespearean vibe to it. I found these lines to be totally classic, as if transported from another time:


Cupid's arrows, themselves, know love by no name
driven by taut string, callow hands, and an impetuous aim

Seriously, you understand the language and its potency. Perchance a sonnet may be in your future.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, you continue to humble me. Actually, I must admit, the sonnet scares me as much as the Trijan Refrain once did. Being that I've just tackled the former, the latter may just be next. I would have to remember to credit you for the push if i do.

[TL Boehm]

I enjoyed it. Its a bit different for you - but still relatable.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Yes, it really was. So much so, that I heavily doubted it. I'm glad it seems I was indeed wrong, thank you.

[Joyce S. Greene]

A love pursued too soon after the hurt of a love turned sour can indeed be a very "foul" one, PH. I love your word play in this one - so much meaning imbedded in these very heart-felt words. Merry Christmas!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so much, Joyce I'm glad it has been so well received. I really don't know where the words to this came from... it kind of wrote itself. Your review has truly left me humbled.

[Tom]

A lesson here to be learned for sure, don't take love for granted as it may come back and bite you !

A stoic write and I also like the style of your pen with this one!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, friend... your visit and thoughts are very much appreciated.

[Dye]

This is a wonderful write. However I am a romantic at heart, and although I believe that love can be unkind, I believe it can also be amazing. I agree with icelandicblue, it does have a Shakespearean flow to it, you are a true talent. I am happy that you shared this gem instead of just keeping it tucked away in a notebook.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you beyond words, Dye. I am a hopeless romantic at heart myself. My writes tend to be dark, and love always finds itself beneath my pen somewhere. I'm glad you were able to enjoy the piece though. My doubts on the piece are quickly vanishing.

[Sami Khalil]

The title , the poem and the classic touch are all wonderful.

"a stricken heart is all too easily romanced

and the wretched step to a fleeting dance"

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, dear friend. Your thoughts are uplifting.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:..................

[Rachelle]

Vulnerability and a little insanity.... this emotion eats us all....

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

That it does, thank you for leaving me with your thoughts.

[Angel of Chaos]

This is such a marvelous piece. Please never have any doubts of this.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, words such as yours are quickly erasing those doubts.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the allusion at the end to romeo and juliet..."a rose by any other name would smell as sweet"

but the next rose and the next rose and the next...will all wither and die...and cupid will just move on playing his damn game with hearts.

this is one of my favorite poems i have read in awhile...

jacob

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Jacob, I truly don't have the words to respond appropriately. Thank you, and its an honor to read such exceptional thoughts on this piece. Especially, being that I truly did doubt the worthiness of this piece.