Hoping On Dreaming

After, the aftermath.

The landscape of us lies in ruin,

bombs of truth brought the wrath

of an unforgiving nuclear winter

(on our summer's parade).

 

Blue skies churn ominous blacks;

the ground is absent of any green,

and we, are all that remain.

Leafless trees, a pair...

not yet devoid of life.

 

A blotted out sun begs to be seen,

the soot of eradicated deceptions

thicken the clouds and once crisp air.

We're standing, lost, amidst the carnage.

 

With no authentic way out,

I submit to the clutch of my own delusions,

falling through the gaps

of a decimated reality...

landing where desire rules over all.

 

Here... the ground is up, walking is flying,

even the infinite continuum of day & night

shatters at a sigh... if you wish it so.

Everything exists as we command. We need only

to hold fast to concrete fantasy and whimsical truth.

 

Join me, shed that sordid existense;

let us leap to the mouth of oblivion,

gone from this place... pennies lost in a sofa.

take my hand, love; lets live on hoping---

dreaming lasts forever.

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

I am blown away by the precision with which you've worked this metaphor, both technically and emotionally. The heat of the moment is fleeting, but the aftermath is the reality check, that which haunts us with indelible images that are impossible to turn away from. An awesome piece of poetic allegory, and as with Caradoc, one for my library.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you... I am humbled by your review and clarity of this piece. I look forward to reading your work as well. I hope my material continues to impress.

[Caradoc]

Favorited.

Amazing word choice and use of metaphor. I absolutely loved how you flipped everything around in the second to last paragraph. That was awesome. Although, my favorite stanza has to be the first. That opening was so powerful, setting the stage for the rest of the piece with a blast.

And yet, not quite so hidden within all of the metaphor is the simple desire of one person to pick up the pieces of a broken relationship and make something new and lasting. To just be with the one person that they love. Beautiful.

You are a great poet.

-Caradoc

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Caradoc, I am truly at a lost for words. You've humbled my pen hand beyond measure. I'm elated you enjoyed this piece so much and interpreted it so accurately. I honestly can't thank you enough for your sincere compliment on my abilities, coming from a peer I respect, makes it all the more humbling.

[Caradoc]

You are most welcome. I myself am humbled by your opinion of my ability.

I wish you both a great day and hope that your week is fruitful and full of joy.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I wish the same for you as well.

[Lydia Shutter]

The metaphors you employ here are absolutely brilliant. “Dreaming lasts forever” and hope springs eternal. Even when deceptions run rampant and reality as you wanted it to me has been decimated, there is hope. If both are willing to try again and genuinely make an effort, it can work. Great vocabulary in this poem. I especially liked the optimism in this line, “walking is flying.” When you with the one you love, anything is possible. Really a dreamy sort of write and one my rose colored glasses love. Lydi**

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Lydia, thank you, your words have humbled me completely. You have firmly grasped my thoughts whilst composing this. I'm elated you enjoyed this and equally thankful for your review.

[Tom]

A sincere invitation to a much better place seems to be the key to happiness in this instance!

A serene poem of escapism from a nadir like place to nirvana itself!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

You've summed it up perfectly, Tom. Thanks for the great review.

[NebraskaHope]

i love it very inspirational .

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks, bro... I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Sami Khalil]

"With no authentic way out,

I submit to the clutch of my own delusions,

falling through the gaps

of a decimated reality...

landing where desire rules over all."

Everything has an aftermath and sometimes we need to count the cost and contain the losses when we do the math. A dark but a wonderful write...:)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you for stopping by, Sami its always a pleasure to receive your thoughts. I have been absent for some time, but I will be catching up on your recent works as well. Thanks again, for the great review.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...........................

[gabrielle]

When we are put in a grim and dark situations, the only thing to do is to hold on what we believe in, move on, pick up the pieces and hope thereafter that everything will turn out great. i specially like the optimistic ending in this piece. Beautifully penned.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so much, for such a wonderful review. Its been awhile since i've written something, i greatly appreciate your review.