Help Me Remember

This is my first piece ever written, in Grammar school. It is 1 of 3 of my pieces that are most dear to me. They are the only works of mine that was physically read by my father before his passing.

Father,

Help me remember,

Your firm but gentle touch.

Help me remember,

Why you loved me so much.

Help me remember,

When in the dark, how the moonlight blanketed your face.

Help me remember,

When at dinnertime, I always saved your space.

Help me remember,

How you once laced my shoes.

Help me remember,

How you once told me, "always repay your do's."

Help me remember,

The protection of your strong voice.

Help me remember,

How you once told me, "a man makes his own choice."

Help me remember,

How you were there in my time of need.

Help me remember,

How, when you left, my heart started to bleed.

Author's Note

Thank you for reading. Sorry my return isn't more spectacular, but these pieces are particularly important to me due to the time of year. Posting the other 2 as well. I will be posting new material soon after. For any confused readers, this piece is about my biological father, he passed away when I was 2 years of age. The man who I called father, married my mother some years later. I am lucky and grateful to have encountered him, and I am honored to have called him dad.

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

This was a very very good poem. It sounded very poetic, how you kept repeating help me remember...
The rhyming scheme was amazing, it flowed very well.
I love how it was deep and had great meaning.... well written :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, I am humbled by your thoughts on this piece.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

your most welcome :)

[Oyindamola Shoola]

Very touching.....Iwas close to tears when I read it...... good rhymes.... "help me remember" sounds like an heartbeat.....very effecive

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, I'm again appreciative of your wonderful words.

[Coyote Poetry]

It is a very good poem. I'm a Grandfather now. I learn the hard way to be kinder and understanding. Being a parent is hard. You must learn. I like the purpose of the poem. Sometime we can lose our place. Father and son should be friends. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, dear friend.

[Lydia Shutter]

This time of year, we miss our loved ones who have passed even more than other times of year. The pain of losing your father is strong in this write. The rhyming is good. The repetition of "help me remember" is very effective. Good work. Lydi**

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so much for a lovely review, Lydia.

[Tom]

A heartfelt remembrance in tribute to your late father!

His memory lives on through this touching poem !

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Tom... as an adolescent, I often struggled with not being able to remember my biological father. This was birthed out of that frustration.

[Renée]

of all the days to find this… tears form as I write and I shall leave them here..for I understand the depth from which this came…how sweet your heart P H .. what a gift to be able to express your feelings at such a young age… Thank you for sharing so much of yourself with us P H !
this is my own fathers birthday..he passed when I was 6 ..

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

You've given this piece life with those words. This is the month my dad passed away. He was the first to learn of my writing poetry, besides my school teacher. I felt it would be a disservice to him not to write something this month (as well as share these early pieces). I'm sorry to learn of your loss. I guess, sometimes, we never know exactly how much we may have in common with one another.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is way beyond the years of grammar school in its maturity...

a heartfelt piece that would have moved him immensely..

jacob

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Jacob.

[Sami Khalil]

This poem is so heartfelt , sad and lovely gratitude to the great man in your life...A splendid as usual...Bravo

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you as always... you continue to be a good friend.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:)....................

[Laura Harrison]

This is such a sad but beautiful piece about the loss of a father. Great write :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so much for your kind review. It is most appreciated.

[Laura Harrison]

You're welcome :)