Self Portrait

For WC... my first piece composed entirely on WC.

Dark, coiled locks cascade down

passing broad shoulders;

framing a chocolate brown face

with high cheek bones,

and a slender button nose.

Full lips that love to kiss

dreams and high hopes.

The strongest feature

are those eyes,

strangely, they hold within them

strength and weariness.

They've seen too much, but

still they refuse to shut.

They paint such a tragically,

beautiful portrait...

that I am glad to call my own.

Author's Note

Thank you for reading. A special thanks to Angi for extending this exercise to me.

Reviews

[Joyce S. Greene]

You have painted a self-portrait that suggests your inner self by the things you say about your physical characteristics. That is not easily done and you did it very well. Your inner strength in the face of pain and tragedy shines through along with your readiness to love. Excellent poetry!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so very much for those words. You have captured the essence of this piece firmly!

[Joyce S. Greene]

You're very welcome. I enjoy reading your very fine poetry

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

It is very mutual, Joyce.

[Lyn Anderson]

Very powerful visuals and a strong sense of self conveyed simply yet beautifully.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, your kind words are very much appreciated.

[Rachelle]

Very vivid image! Beginning to like your work!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you very much, i will be certain to read your work as well.

[Tom]

An open and honest description of oneself, portraying both humanity and decorum within your words!

Splendid indeed my friend!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you for a wonderful review on this piece.

[gabrielle]

you painted in words a vivid picture of you. the phrase i love best is those pertaining to the eyes:
"The strongest feature
are those eyes,
strangely, they hold within them
strength and weariness." ---utterly wonderful!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, gabrielle... I appreciate such a lovely review.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Interesting self portrait....I found the imagery very vivid and the language really lent itself to the idea of painting a picture. I like that you put in feelings along with the visuals "Full lips that love to kiss" -- nicely done. I think you executed the challenge with grace and beauty.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Sarah. I have come to really value your thoughts and/or suggestions, I am completely humbled by your thoughts on this piece.

[Angi]

Travis, this self portait is so good. You give us little glimpses of not only your physical features, but of what is inside, too. I see a beautiful, sensitive man inside and out. Well done! Angi~

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you so much, Angi. I've been anxiously awaiting your thoughts on this piece. lol I'm glad to know it came out well. With the work you and the others have done with this subject, its an honor to be anywhere near the class you all sit.

[lee von cleef]

Pain and weariness, I like the combination, sour and sweet I think it is good to blend a readers mind , to direct it in directions , down roads it would not walk on its own. Good job.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, you sincere review is much appreciated. I will be certain to reciprocate the gesture.

[Yellow Butterfly]

This is a wonderful work of Art....and a beautiful self portrait of your most intimate personal legacy...to date.... YOU!! The more I read you the more of you I want to read (if that makes sense)

Bravo for this personal self-analysis PH :O)

Your writes are so profound and a real joy to read....

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

You have left me speechless... I wish I could find the words to tell you how your thoughts are affecting me. I am grateful for your sincerity... thank you so very much!