Holding You Close

Another early piece... written when I was 17.

no words are used

our bodies have spoken...

yet we continue,

seems like our emotions

wanted to communicate all the long

our bodies shout a sweet chorus

and our souls orchestrate the song,

our hearts desire to dance

as we move about each other...

so we squeeze---

until we become one another

we are united

and soar to depths

that have yet to be piloted...

i am what you are

and you are what i was

and just for a fraction in time---

everything that was

ceases to be that surrounded us

and the only thing

that could survive...

was love

Author's Note

Thank you reading.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Love is often most beautiful when no words are spoken. Just a look in the eyes, a brush of a hand, a smile, perhaps, and everything that could have been "said" already has. This was very nicely written, especially at the young age you were when you wrote it. Just a few little tweeks with the punctuation and form and this would be perfection. Nicely done.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you... you're compliments are most appreciated. Again, I will follow up on your suggestions when I go into edit mode; still working on a couple of other pieces at the moment. I greatly appreciate your insights.

[Angi]

Only 17?! This is really strong work, Travis. You are only getting better and better, man! Angi~

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Angi... yea, I was only 17. I wrote this during my second(and final) stint in high school, due to having to work I had to drop out to keep from being homeless again.

[Angi]

Hardship like that can go one of two ways. Looks like you chose right. Art from the pain is always the way to go.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Angi your words truly mean a lot to me.

[annabellee]

wow such a brilliant read and write, you were already so talented at the age of 17.
Well done :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you... your thoughts leave me at a lost for words. Your review is most humbling.

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Passionate and sweet at the same time - I am truly awed at the poet you were at 17 - as well as the poet you are now! Great piece, Hero!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Rita I've always loved hard. It is a gift and a curse in the hands of us poets. I do appreciate you wonderful and stellar review.

[ShelleyA]

A beautiful write about the dance of love. Heartfelt and romantic. Skillfully crafted free verse which I enjoy. Lovely imagery, vivid and delightfully sensual. Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Nice rhythm. Deep expression of emotion about love, this special gift shared when two become one. Good word choice. Nice use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration. Well penned. Write on!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Shelley for such an indepth review. Your thoughts are most appreciated and motivating... I look forward to reading your work as well.

[ShelleyA]

You're very welcome and my pleasure.

[Sami Khalil]

"until we become one another
we are united
and soar to depths
that have yet to be piloted...
i am what you are
and you are what i was
and just for a fraction in time---
everything that was
ceases to be that surrounded us
and the only thing
that could survive...
was love"
A splendid read and write ...Thank you for sharing...:)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Sami... your reviews are always appreciated.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)........

[Rogue]

-sigh-
I don't know what it is, but something g in your words as I read always finds it's way inside me and twists... Enough that my chest grows tight and I feel the first stirrings of old pain.
Not necessarily a bad thing. Just a strange thing. With this piece... I don't see the view as mine. It is someone else's you have captured. His thoughts in a time before...

-grin-
I've gotten to were I tiptoe in here... I know what's coming most times. Just eerie...

A beautiful write, Travis. Extremely advanced even at that age. :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Rogue your words are always looked forward to. Maybe we share some cosmic connection in some alternate time line, and this is the residual tethers of those lives lived. Or, my imagination is on full blast tonight. haha No matter the case, I am always touched to know my work affects you on such an intimate level.

[Rogue]

You were a Fringe fan weren't you?
-smile-
You are always welcome. :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Fringe? I can't say I'm familiar with it, I'll look into it tho.

[SyberRose]

A sensuous romantic write of the song and dance of love. Beautifully penned...each line complimenting the next.
Enjoyed Travis...Rose:)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Rose. Coming from such a master of written romance, your words are an extreme compliment.