Don't Forget Me(My Beloved)

wrote this after reading Pablo Neruda's, "If You Forget Me."

For you, my beloved

i wait... anticipating your return like the horizon does the sun

or stars do night

my heart waits for your heart

and my love waits for your love

each hoping, you don't forget

 

your return restores purpose to an existence

that your depature left bitter and frozen

life turned to stone... vivid colors to pitch black

my heart wants to know only you

 

so, if you have forgotten me

i will know nothing else

my interest in anything and everything

will crumble into the cold fold of a lifeless universe

 

without you here...

motivation becomes just another thing i had once

and i stand aside the cursed

arms of the damned can't reach hope

 

so, don't forget me...

my heart needs you to remember

my love needs you to remember

because neither can forget you

 

and until you remember,

i ask undelaying time for more of itself

negotiating with the creeping blackness

not to take my heart just yet

 

if any claim witness to your forgetful heart

i will strike down the notion with unrivaled swiftness

and escape to the secret valleys

where the cackling of ignorance

entertains my worrisome spirit,

as i retrace your steps in the places you loved me most

 

don't forget me... my lips repeat again and again

if they reach you, i don't know

but waiting is my task to endure

for you, my beloved

Author's Note

This was in no way a challenge to the aforementioned poet, this was inspired by his great piece. If you are unfamiliar with it, please give it a read. Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[s y e]

This was really well worded piece of poetry PH! I loved it as always, another stunning write, keep it up!

~ Noodle.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Noodle... It pleases me to know i belong in the company of all the talent i've come to encounter.

[annabellee]

This is just gorgeous, I enjoyed reading every single line.
Great write :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you... I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[annabellee]

you're most welcome :)

[Shaun Payton]

A challenge to Neruda, no one would think that my friend, you were inspired thats a purpose of art and poetry. As for the write...it resonates a charm and adoration..Its delicate and strong when need be. "I will strike down the notion with unrivaled swiftness."
Excellent work.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Yes, that is indeed a purpose, i just wanted to make the intent of the piece clear. I may have forgotten I'm amongst fellow writers for a sec. lol Thank you for the outstanding review... i hope my work continues to rise to this standard.

[Shaun Payton]

You are welcome. Its easy to forget, some times its nice to just be a fan of a poet on here.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Very true.

[Shaun Payton]

If I were always lets say a critic, poetry wouldnt be fun to me. You write well, its always worth reading what you post

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

I am very grateful for those words, I can't begin to say thank you. I appreciate you coming to view my work and will reciprocate the gesture. Your work has been a pleasure to read as well.

[Shaun Payton]

Anytime, read request help me navigate around. Well thank you as well poet:)

[Sami Khalil]

The hopeless romantic at his best...Thank you for sharing...:)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you for those wonderful words. I always appreciate your visit.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome friend...:)

[SyberRose]

I loved it...and i will read his poem too...i hope it inspires me the way it did you....beautiful...Rose

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks, Rose, i am sure it will inspire you as well. I look forward to reading what it produces. In those masterful hands, i know it will be something timeless.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is an incredibly strong love poem...intense feeling in all of these lines..

jacob

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Jacob... i'm glad to know my emotion was able to translate through my words. i appreciate you taking the time to review this piece.

[quinfinn]

this is superb romance poetry! i am in awe of the beauty of this write....no kidding, this is excellent!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Coming from a masterful romance poet, i am beyond humbled! Thank you, my dear friend.

[Rita L. Sev]

Haven't read that one in years, so I read it just now. Your poem, while clearly in your own voice, is a beautiful companion to Neruda's. There is a need and a longing that is palpable in your words. Great write!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Rita. Thats exactly what i was going for, just wanted to show the other side of the coin he presented.