She Who Walks My Dreams

She appears from an endless desert
With no one by her side
She remains overlooked...
Until I open my eyes
Her presence is overwhelming
As if she's a Greek goddess
Her very touch captures me
But it is my soul it holds hostage
Her eyes are as deep as the ocean
And hold more meaning than most quotations
Her body is compelling to the tongue
Then it hits me
What could be her name
As her beauty is complimented by the sun
I glimpse at her lips, as I lick mine
Hoping she'll provide the answer that'll ease my mind
Still in a trance,
I fail to get the question out
And every time to my amazement
I seem to wake...

Just as she opens her mouth

Author's Note

More of my very early work.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. I like the use of a dream. Dreams are the highway to real life. Dreams are warning of opportunity and bad things to come. I like your description. Leaving the dreamer with question and mystery. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you for the great review, and for another visit. Back then I was a hopeful romantic, still kinda am i guess. lol

[Frieda P]

Love the opening line, 'an endless desert', just like a dream and real life, when you get to the good parts, it usually ends, nicely pen'd.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you for the lovely review, Frieda. You are right, too many things in life seem to end just as the good parts start to show up.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Splendid read and write.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, my dear friend.

[Stella Armour]

what an awful time to awaken from your beautiful dream..."Her very touch captures me
But it is my soul it holds hostage", i think these are truly lovely lines and i enjoyed then images you have portrayed as well...

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you for the lovely review, Stella. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Rogue]

-smile-

And did you ever learn her name?

This is a very tender and delicate piece. A wonderful write from you when younger. It is clearly far above the level one would expect. :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Never got her name. Haha back then I was an pretty good essayist, and my writing teacher challenged me to test my skills creatively. Thus, a poet was born.

[Sami Khalil]

"Her eyes are as deep as the ocean
And hold more meaning than most quotations
Her body is compelling to the tongue
Then it hits me
What could be her name
As her beauty is complimented by the sun
I glimpse at her lips, as I lick mine"
Thank you for sharing this splendid write...:)
Hoping she'll provide the answer that'll ease my mind

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you for coming by to read it, my good friend.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I love the emotion in this piece, so profound and poignant. The first lines elude to a "dream lover", that remains overlooked until the narrator opens his eyes; an uncommon and interesting image. Then, the last lines...the narrator wakes just before his question is answered; a nice tie up of the story within the poem. So, concept is very nicely done.

Technically, I like the free verse pattern, and the flow is pretty nice throughout. My only suggestion would to be a little more concretely descriptive, for instance: "As if she's a Greek goddess"--which one? Is she an Athena, beautiful and powerful or an Aphrodite, all love and energy? Or perhaps she is Hecate in disguise, using her "magic" on you... Things like that would just punch it up a little. Overall, though, nicely done.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Sarah for the great and insightful review. This is, if I remember correctly, the 2nd or 3rd poem I had ever written. Didn't want to edit it, but I was a bit vague back then. lol

[Holly Mason]

well nice early work
great imagery
take a sleeping pill or something -I want to know what she has to say!!
title grabbed my attention
thank you for sharing

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you for the review, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll have to see if the sleeping pill works. lol

[Sirius King]

great concept and it ended perfectly

good stuff!

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thanks for the review. This is one of my very first pieces.