An Apple for Her(revised)

Fantasy senryu challenge

       fresh chalk on her dress

                       a red apple for her day...

                         hoping she'd kiss me

 

Author's Note

I hope I got the 5-7-5 right. Here's my shot at it.

Reviews

[QuietlyCrash]

Aw, how sweet is this. This is very easy to relate to because I think we've all had a crush on at least one of our teachers. Very nice write :)
-Riley

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you, Riley and you're right, we all have that one. lol Thanks for the sweet review.

[SyberRose]

Cute one...sounds like a student having a crush on his teacher:)Good job.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

That's it exacty... had the biggest crush on my 3rd grade teacher. i used to think the ABC's were our special song. lol

[SyberRose]

Haa...thats funny but that was good one.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Thank you... just trying to keep up with all of the talent here.