Let’s make a home together

Let's make a home
You, I and a group of colored flowers
Dreaming dawn; Dew drops on a flower petals
A few insects, floating life might fall on to spider web
Tune up rain could be on the tin shed
With all, you and I face to face;
one heart in the same circle
Affection puddle on the finger tip
Let fireworks send the message of condolence to the dark
Who cares?
Come on, come on ....
Let's make a home together!

Let's make a wall inside the our home, Nail to the wall
With water impression, let's get painted on the wall
Come on, let's make a home
You I and one simple plate, eat all we deserve
Love each other with a great gratification
To see the tadpole's cycle of life,
Lets wake up with dreamy eyes
And acknowledge the early morning
Come on, let's make a home together
You, I and a moment ;
Left behind the hundred years old forgotten city
Who cares?
Let's make a home together!

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

I love how you have introduced so much nature in this poem. Lovely images of dawn, dew on petals, spiders webs, insects. What an invitation, to set up home together with someone you love. Who needs great wealth when you have nature's gifts. And loving comes free of charge. I thought of displaced people and war torn cities. It may not be what you intended HB Rita, but that is where my thoughts took me. Love is everything and I thought of new beginnings..

Chris

[HB Rita]

I meant few of them..........'displaced people and war torn cities' as you said was one of them. We can join tofether to avoid war and have a peaceful city or country to live together. What all we need is just to be 'together'. Again readers can think of two loving people, one is inviting other to love and share living together. Thanks for your great review.

[Chris Shaw]

You are so welcome :)

[John the Baptist]

Good advice here. Forget the past and the negatives and boldly venture forth.

[Ren Nightshade]

I like it very much, but I have to wonder: Who is the person you are making a home with?

Haha also, I'M BACK BABY!!!

Great poem and sorry it took so long for me to get back.

[HB Rita]

Where have you been? I missed you....

[Ren Nightshade]

Haha life kind of got extremely sucky...so I needed to take a break and get things in order. BUT, I'm back, and I'm lovin it so far!

[Ren Nightshade]

I missed you too!

[HB Rita]

You need to continue writing Girl...

[Ren Nightshade]

I am, I am haha. I have refocused my attention on my book. Which reminds me. I'll send you the next 5 chapters or whatever I haven't sent tomorrow. Or whenever I get the chance.

But enough about me, how are you doing?

[HB Rita]

I am ok.... fighting everyday! Send me the chapters! I am waiting.

[Ren Nightshade]

Haha, I'm on it right now since you are so eager!

[Cherrie Palmer]

To me this has a modern feel and tune. A edgy cadence and a daring message to embrace one another.

[HB Rita]

Thanks Cherrie for your kind words.