The Feeling

The Feeling

A Poem by Yina

          The sweat running down your back

          The heavy breathing

          The nervousness clenching your guts

          The coach yelling

          The crowd cheering

 

          All the amazing feelings and sounds of....

               

                    BASEBALL!!

© 2011 Yina


Author's Note

Yina
I really need a better title! Ideas?? Please?

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You have encaptured your feeling s very well in your short poem.
A title? I agree, I think the title "The Feeling" doesn't do it justice. Perhaps..just "Baseball" as you feel so strongly about it?

Posted 13 Years Ago


Reminds me when I used to play baseball when I was younger...wish it was bigger in England.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Tile: Play On!!! and I like it short and sweet and to the point! Perfect!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I feel with you all the way! :) But too bad you didn't mention burning the dudes with good hits or making great plays. :) Love it! :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Love playing baseball, love the poem, hmmmmm i think you did a GREAT job!!!!! but sorry i suck at titles.... Great job!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow. Now I can say I know what it's like to play baseball. haha! you can't make me play now! Great poem, lol!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Describes baseball.
Good job

Posted 13 Years Ago


LOVE. Perfect description of baseball:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


nice one :)

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on July 15, 2011
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Yina
Yina

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