The Growing Distance

 

 

Breezes sigh a new scent of something familiar as the wise branches bend to caress and soothe me with a kiss of velvety, green shade. As the weathered path weeps rain behind me, the darkness gains in the race with light leading to a finite point in the rear view mirror. You, a tanned pillar in the growing distance, wearing your torn Levi's with that one hole in the left knee, trying to gain bare-footed composure on a rocky driveway. Eyes of green and blue, seeping every thought of raised voices and sweet smiles thrown around in the garden of fertility that we have shared. That last moment of you spilling over uncontrollably, like your river that has overflowed with emotion in my yard alone,will never be forgotten.

Reviews

[Frances O'Neill]

This is very heart-breaking and emotional scene. It also takes you right there to the setting. I like it a lot.

[bluessadmood]

that was so nice great images you draw so sweet,i loved it all

[L.G. Knight]

"You, a tanned pillar
in the growing distance,
wearing your torn Levi's
with that one hole
in the left knee,
trying to gain bare-footed
composure on a rocky driveway."


This poem had such wonderful imagery I could see the scene as if I stood there watching it play out. A heart wrenching tale of love lost and stubern hearts.... Really and awesome write!

~Frances~

[Jonathan Bodnar]

Wow..is about all I can say. I think my favorite line was: " trying to gain bare-footed
composure on a rocky driveway" I loved the visual to the whole poem.

[r]

this is the sort of thing i'm looking for! want to feel your pain and longing to see that some1 again. my inspiration is from my poem ode to patty. check it out! tell me what you think