My House

"moving in to a new home"

Beads of sound coming down

all to familiar.

Outside chores are out

inside feels peculiar.

Weeks on I've traveled this hall

wonder of others before me

hear their laughter in the walls

maybe... rain splatter.

Walls of darkened wood

creaky floors under my feet

I stopped to feel the house

ever so discreet. 

It's newness makes me happy

It's oldness quite a charm

It's finding it hard to know me

It's finding it hard to warm.

I will belong to an age old passage

of echo's through these halls

It will come to love me

and I will hear it's call.

Reviews

[John the Baptist]

One can feel the speaker's exuberance over the new home. Apparently it's an older dwelling and I like the way the poet imagines herself as a part of an ongoing family of owners. Also like the crisp pacing and the rhyming. Well done. Hope there are no ghosts, or at least no unfriendly ones.

ps: the next to last word should be possessive, not a contraction.

[Gypsy Dreamer]

Thank you John. You get me. So far this is the only house I have ever been in and not felt or seen a spirit yet the house itself has echo's of life. This is what I felt when I moved in and yes I want to revise my last paragraph. Many times I write exactly what I feel without revising but it's usually okay but in this case, I need to revise.

[Relic]

Moving into a new home is always something that holds promise and security. Getting to know the sounds and the look of the interior is all a part of it. :)

[Rikkevi Rue]

Love this for its simplicity, natural flow and it has a certain symmetry the best poets innately feel. Glad that I found your page here when I went out exploring for someone new to read!

[Gypsy Dreamer]

Sorry I'm just responding. Not written in awhile until tonight. Thank you for a beautiful review.

[Helen]

I now understand you are writing about a new home, but on first reading, I thought that you were talking about your interior existence vs your outer one, maybe coming to know your soul. Maybe a house is like that too, but I love the feel of the poem, it conveys a strong feeling of belonging

[Gypsy Dreamer]

That is what I love about poetry, It's like art, almost everyone has a different interpretation of it. I many times when writing will have double entendre's or meanings if you will... I possibly did here but it's mostly about getting to know a new home, feel the history or ghost of the past and how I will fit into the history of the house. Also I wanted to feel if it accepted me or not and I feel accepted fine but now that I've been here awhile, I've yet to really feel it like I have others. It's as if it's hiding secrets and very well. ??

[Levi Levin]

A very charming poem indeed. Down to earth and homely. Great job!

[Gypsy Dreamer]

Thank you very much.

[Levi Levin]

Your welcome.

[Franky]

Wow.....this brings back memories of excitement and wonder. The buying of my house! A new life, a new place. A mortgage! Lol

Well done.

[Gypsy Dreamer]

YES! Also I need to know my house and it needs to accept me. I feel that it is mine now but it's quite, it's as if it was freshly built yet it's around 60 years old, lots of life in these walls.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Tentative and without confusion which is rare when writing, well done, good read.

[Gypsy Dreamer]

Thank you very much.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we feel so connected to a new abode, a new house. It becomes us and we become it...the familiarity becomes comfortable, almost like with a lover...
and your poem is so interesting...at the end i am tempted to think of those really old houses where the spirits of those who once lived there stay there infinitely.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

I don't like change dear Poet.
"I will belong to an age old passage
of echo's through these halls
It will come to love me
and I will hear it's call."
I agree, with time. New home will be okay. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Gypsy Dreamer]

Thank you Coyote