Tragic is The Girl In Black

  Tragic

is the girl in black--

the reason for her darkness

and cause of utter wrack.

 

She fears the morning light--

knowing merely night.

Her inner-demons -- self-destructive--

never could she fight.

 

She is a spider

in the corner--

wishes to become a bird.

Oh, but how absurd!

She wouldn't know to fly

even if she'd try.

 

Subconsciously

she weaves her webs

of poison and deceit.

Inner-voices-- devils--

wishes to defeat.

Positive her family 

love her wrongly so,

for all she brings upon her land

is acid rain

and snow.

 

"Kill me!" Yells the girl

in black--

tragic

is her life.

All around her hold a spoon-

solely she a knife.

Reviews

[aLittlePain]

Even darkness cannot just exist in the shadows. Thriving on pain is merely a habit macabre cries for help eventually we all need that light. Great piece. R xo

[guy drori]

Thank you for the review. And I agree, even the darkest ones seek light one way or another

[Paul Bell]

Black is what it is, a cloak to hide the insecurity of life.
But even this girl wants the light to shine upon her.
Is it to late. Who knows.

[guy drori]

Thank you for the review Paul.
Yes, your words are true I believe. She does want the light to shine on her yet she doesn't know how.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and yet deep inside she is crying out for someone to see the positives in her, what she has to offer...
she seems to thrive on pain...like someone i know well...but there is a heart that wants to be freed...wants to be noticed for what she can give---

a dark journey here, but i see someone who really wants to get to the light...

some seek attention by being macabre...but the inner voice is crying for help...for a light.

j.

[guy drori]

Appreciate the review Jacob :)
I am glad you saw the poem for what I wrote it to be. Yes, the girl wants to be free from her own darkness and does have something good to offer but she doesn't know how to offer it.

[Jackie L]

Beautiful. Just beautiful.

Inner demons are always the hardest to fight. You want to stop the endless cycle, but you never quite know how to escape from its clutches.

[guy drori]

Thank you for reviewing :)
Yes, it is like an endless cycle which is destructive, and difficult to end.

[None]

Well written my friend, well written in deed!! And so powerful can the human shadow grow!!!

[guy drori]

Thanks for the encouraging review :) Glad you enjoyed it . . . And I agree - the human shadow can grow to sizes often bigger than our own size.

[C. Rose]

favorite lines: spider wishes to be a bird, all around her hold a spoon, only she a knife

[guy drori]

Thank for the review!
Yes, those were actually my favorite lines as well - they show that she is different from the rest and still doesn't accept herself for who she is for she wishes to be something that she can never be.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Wow! Hauntingly beautiful!
Loved the eloquent flow and vivid imagery, so very much.
Last stanza is plain awesome!

PS: in second stanza, third line, I feel that you meant 'her' instead of 'he'.

[guy drori]

Thank you for your comment... glad you liked it :)
And yes, thank you for the correction. It is in fact supposed to be 'her'. Changed it...

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

No problem.
You are welcome.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

And she seems very tragic indeed. Well represented.

[guy drori]

Thank you....

[AYVID N]

Great poem. You portray her darkness so well. Nicely written...

[guy drori]

Thank you . . . appreciate the comment :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Photo gave life to your words and I liked the tale told in the poem. Must be careful twisted woman lost in the darkness. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[guy drori]

Thank you Coyote ;)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.