I Thrive in What Keeps Me Alive

Oh

how I adore the sound

of a fearful, quivering

ground.

Of a chilly

winter wind

screaming to the sky.

Of a grandpa 

who's in sorrow

breathing out a painful sigh.

So

how I despise the sound

of a cheerful, chirping

robin.

Of a warm

summer breeze

humming to the sky.

Of a grandma

who's in joy

laughing in the clouds so high.

To banish light

I strive

for it in darkness that I thrive.

Agony and chaos

keep me well alive.

Reviews

[thelux]

What a masterpiece. Well done. I absolutely love the wording of the last stanza. And, agreeing with David Scott, the voice, to me, is not one of evil. I feel them to be sudden feelings of anger, sadness, whatever it might be, that one can't keep down. The word I'm really looking for, I suppose, is impulsive. Impulsive feelings that will soon calm down, but once they start, they boil over, and the actions that you complete while absorbed in these feelings are done with no caution whatsoever and the consequences will suddenly come back to bite you after the feelings are gone. Bravo.

[David Scott]

Interesting piece.
The voice is not one of evil to me. Rather it is the voice of one whom evil has fed when there was nothing to nourish. It resonates of pain and darkness, but is not pain and darkness itself.
My heart would embrace this voice and its pain while offering the shattered egg shells from the nest of a song bird's birth.
I would sing songs with the voice of painful groaning and weave a tapestry of tears to wrap the laughter of the wise.
I would feed what must be fed, while introducing what must be learned to transform...
For where there is life, there is hope, even when hopelessness is all there is sustaining it.
Maybe... 😀
Wow! You got me thinking.
Loved the write!
I actually do see your point.
Evil is real. Evil itself must never be compromised with. Evil does indeed thrive and feed on suffering. It is just my nature to take a thought and juxtapose a debate of rational inspection upon a tangent.
Thank you again for offering such a fine poem.

[Aristede Craig Jr]

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[guy drori]

Thank you for you comment, and I'll be sure to check out that work of your :)

[Confuser]

guy drori: Now this is a fantastic poem, that wonderfully expresses the emotions of an evil persona. Very well done. Thank you so very much!!!

[guy drori]

Thank you so much for reading ! And I very much appreciate your kind words.
I'm glad you were able to pick up on the emotions that do in fact express a somewhat evil, or dark persona.
Take care :)

[Confuser]

My pleasure.....

[Sami Khalil]

An outstanding poem. I like your style a lot. Keep excelling ...:)......

[guy drori]

Thank you so much for reading ! and glad you enjoyed it :)

[Semaj "I AM" Allure]

Yes, this is dope. It's different; the irony makes this one of the best poems i've read in the cafe so far! Darkness is needed to grow...

[guy drori]

Thank you man...appreciate you reading. And I definitely agree with you !

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

This is amazingly good. I so much appreciated the movement of your words in ascending order. I love the last stanza and its end rhyme. Although it seems contradictory. Well written. Guy.

[guy drori]

Thank you for reading and commenting ! Appretiate it.... and glad you enjoyed

[Kshitij Srivastava]

Indeed, agony and chaos..keeps me well alive. Interesting read (y)

[guy drori]

Thank you :)

[Joel Armstrong]

They are but two sides of the same coin,Good and evil.everybody's got a dark side. I especially liked the last stanza of how you described the dark entity.An extraordinary write

[guy drori]

Thank you Joal...and I agree, we all have a bad side and a good side. What we need to seek for is not to rid of our bad side or the good side, yet to find balance between both of them.

[Joel Armstrong]

Exactly.finally I've met someone who understands the topic.where's good without evil after all...

[Shivai]

The title is amazing, so is your poem. "sometimes evil is just who we are" Simply beautiful!
-shivai

[guy drori]

Thank you very much for commenting...glad you liked it :)