Patience

She felt an unease heaviness in the wind. 

"You're just another let down.  

Another chapter full of mistakes." 

Some people are novels, 

the world will never get tired of reading, she thought. 

He said she seemed like an old soul, 

She told him she was just swoon by the moon. 

Her eyes downcast and brimming, 

With a broken voice she asked Time how long 

it would take for him to put the pieces of her broken heart together. 

"Patience, my loved one" said time, 

"I'll teach you". 

"I'm not everyone's cup of tea. 

I don't connect to other souls easily." 

She said as she put her hands on her face and started sobbing. 

"Maybe life is this luxurious thing that is not meant for the weak-minded. 

Un stimulated souls that are not entwined are unhappy." 

She looked up at the starry night, tears rolling down her cheeks. 

"Sometimes we create our own heartbreaks through expectation." Said Time 

and laid a comforting hand on her shoulder. 

Letting her know that she'll never be alone, whatever may come.

Reviews

[apennylate]

Excuse my language here.. . But this is f*****g dope... Written with a melancholy twist, I could FEEL, rather than just see... The ravages of time and nature on our souls... Like swooning under the moon... I am amazed at your talent, Gullia... Glad I had a chance to see and discover your transparently emotional work... Seriously, keep at it, and I hope your day finds you restful and ready for action...! Take care

[Giulia King]

Silente! Your review made my day! Sorry for the delay. A million thanks! I hope you have an amazing day :)

[Harley Quinn]

Creative! Unique. I enjoyed reading this.

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much :)

[Donicca Dona L]

beautiful, beautiful beautiul

[Giulia King]

A million thanks!

[Ty]

Pretty amazing, "she'll never be alone...". This was great.

[Giulia King]

Thank you, Ty! :)

[Ardra]

"Sometimes we create our own heartbreaks through expectation."

very beautifully penned dear...
and the pic is also breathtakingly beautiful..

[Giulia King]

Thank you dear writer!

[LylaCrystal]

My dear, I suggest you to start writing books. I would really like if we would cooperate in the future. Good job!

~Lyla

[Giulia King]

Thank you for your encouraging words dear Lyla! You've made my day. I'd like that too.
Many hugs

[Jamieya B-Johnson]

Beautiful! I hope you have a book, you got what it takes!

[Giulia King]

You have no idea how much your review made me smile. My biggest goal in life is to write a book. I really hope that I get the courage to write one.
xx

[Fahmida Mehreen]

The use of words and expressions are really praiseworthy. Wonderfully written. Not to mention the image! Beautiful altogether.

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much, beautiful :)

[Zoya]

The personification of time was a real wise and creative idea, it's dialogues were no less wiser:
"Sometimes we create our own heartbreaks through expectation."
Beautifully penned. Also, a lovely image to complement the piece.

[Giulia King]

Thank you, Zoe. I'm happy you like my piece :)

[Zoya]

My pleasure!

[Ethan]

Grammar and spelling corrections/optional edits:

She felt an uneasy heaviness in the wind.
"You're just another let down.
Another chapter full of mistakes."
Some people are novels
the world will never get tired of reading, she thought.
He said she seemed like an old soul.
She told him she was just swooned by the moon.
Her eyes were downcast and brimming,
And with a broken voice she asked Time how long
it would take for him to put the pieces of her broken heart together.
"Patience, my loved one" said Time,
"I'll teach you".
"I'm not everyone's cup of tea.
I don't connect with other souls easily,"
she said as she put her hands on her face and started sobbing.
"Maybe life is this luxurious thing that is not meant for the weak-minded.
Un-stimulated souls that are un-entwined are unhappy."
She looked up at the starry night, tears rolling down her cheeks.
"Sometimes we create our own heartbreaks through expectation," said Time,
as he laid a comforting hand on her shoulder,
Letting her know that she'll never be alone, whatever may come.

Comment:
I don't really have many comments except for those which were referenced above. "You're just another let down" and the sentence that follows are a bit cliche, but not dreadfully so. You've got some incomplete sentences and extra commas here and there, but other than that I enjoyed your piece a lot. The picture at the end is especially beautiful (not to detract from your work of course). Nicely done.

[Giulia King]

Thank you .

[Ethan]

No problem :)