Patience

She felt an unease heaviness in the wind. 

"You're just another let down.  

Another chapter full of mistakes." 

Some people are novels, 

the world will never get tired of reading, she thought. 

He said she seemed like an old soul, 

She told him she was just swoon by the moon. 

Her eyes downcast and brimming, 

With a broken voice she asked Time how long 

it would take for him to put the pieces of her broken heart together. 

"Patience, my loved one" said time, 

"I'll teach you". 

"I'm not everyone's cup of tea. 

I don't connect to other souls easily." 

She said as she put her hands on her face and started sobbing. 

"Maybe life is this luxurious thing that is not meant for the weak-minded. 

Un stimulated souls that are not entwined are unhappy." 

She looked up at the starry night, tears rolling down her cheeks. 

"Sometimes we create our own heartbreaks through expectation." Said Time 

and laid a comforting hand on her shoulder. 

Letting her know that she'll never be alone, whatever may come.

Reviews

[BlackPrince]

This certainly is a poem of optimism, long endurance and hopefulness--the key attributes of patience.

Cool!

[barleygirl]

Reading your poem is like watching a film, so intricate in the various interactions, such an abundance of well-done dialogue, and balancing great details of real-life tribulations plus a fantasy interaction with time. So much imagination, yet everything so believable & relatable. I love the gentle way that your ideas seem to have been spilled along the way, gradually revealing where your poem is going (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[richieb]

Beautiful poem that speaks to everyone's heart. The conversation is creative and works perfectly for this work. Thank you for a great poem.
Blessings,
Richie b.

[Suhd]

Time has been given the quality of a healer. Amazing idea, expressed marvelously :)

[Giulia King]

Thank you for your amazing reviews! :)

[poetictori]

Love the writing, it's very unique. With the art, it's like a meaningful and poetic comic strip.

[Giulia King]

I'm happy you liked it :) Thanks for reading.

[Matthew Kult]

Curiously wondering, sadly lonesome, troubling thoughts.

Great Read

Matthew

[Giulia King]

Many thanks, Matthew :) Happy you like it!

[Matthew Kult]

You are welcome

Matthew

[ROXANE DORSEY]

This is very nice and thanks for your wonderful talent.

[Giulia King]

Thank you for your lovely review :)

[Ashwin Shanker]

I liked how you have characterized time and brought him alive.. its a good idea... and also liked the illustration attached

[Giulia King]

I'm happy you like it! Thank you for reading

[Cecelia A. Green]

oh my this is perfect.
"Sometimes we create our own heartbreaks through expectation." I agree with this line so much!

[Giulia King]

I'm happy you found a line that connects with you! .) Thank you for reading

[Cecelia A. Green]

Always welcome!

[Nigel Newman]

Hi Gullia. I read this and then scanned some of the comments, and saw all the bits I'd been thinking myself. Ethan's edits are exactly what I'd like to have been done as a proof-read or more likely a check that what you copy pasted had come across as intended. But I was able to put these aspects to one side and enjoy the poem. The idea of a personified 'time' is really interesting; let's hope it would be as gentle and comforting as you portray!.

My final thought is that I'm getting old. Over the last year or two I've read 'sick' being used in a complementary way, and now I'm seeing 'dope' used similarly. For me, a sick dope is either a fool who's ill or one who has twisted unpleasant thoughts. Hey ho!

Nice work.

Regards
Nigel