My Demons

My Demons

A Poem by Giulia King

Why can't I let my demons go?
I'm forever married to the darkness.
I keep screaming into my pillow,
hoping that I'll disappear into thin air.
I light another cigarette,
hoping the smoke will choke me, 
knowing that with every new cigarette, 
I'll be closer to the darkness.
Closer to you.
We all might have something that keeps us wide awake at night, 
keeps our thoughts running wild.
Words are like knives on my skin, slowly cutting me up.
I realize, not every story has a happy ending. 
I can feel him waiting for me.
His eyes are on me.
Sucking me into his embrace.
I can feel him in my bloodstream.
I can't breathe.
He's here,
he's come out to play. 


© 2017 Giulia King


Author's Note

Giulia King
Something different. A work in progress.
*Congratulations!
Your poem My Demons has been awarded First in the What Are Your Secrets? writing contest.*

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A very intensity is conveyed here. When you mention work in progress what to is you refer? I we reading the raw version and is there more rewrite in store? I have a very curious nature, lol.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

It's a work in progress because I'm thinking about making it a bit longer. And this is my first time.. read more
Michael G. Smith

7 Years Ago

So I'm anticipating My Demons Again the sequel. Because you know they never go away. The best we can.. read more
It's true re happy endings. I like 'words are like knives on my skin' and the sense of foreboding, mixed with what feels like a willingness to get on with things.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Thank you, RJ! :)
Something different in a very good way. Provocatively dark and an accurate portrayal of certain addictions. Sounds like the narrator is going through withdrawal. It's actually quite good with its relative intensity and the ending is nearly perfect.

Whether this is about heroin, cigarettes, alcohol, etc, it's a well-written poem about the "Demons" of substance abuse.

A very effective and somewhat bleak poem.
Nice work, King! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

I'm so happy you like it! Although, I don't think I'll ever be as good as you. Your dark poems are a.. read more
Lovecraft

7 Years Ago

Thank you! ;)

You may be correct, but your Love poems are far better than mine. I ex.. read more
ve how deep it is as well as how it is full of that dark theme, you write very well with it.... you should continue great job

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Thank you! Maybe I will :)
That's really good work, interesting..

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Thank you.
A very dark piece coming from you, we all have demons that no matter how hard and fast we run, we can't escape them. This was nicely done and I loved the flow and format. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading :)
Kesha

7 Years Ago

You are welcome :)
light another cigarette,
hoping the smoke will choke me
Very much so.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Thank you for reading
"We all might have something that keeps us wide awake at night,
keeps our thoughts running wild."

I think this is the darkest of your poems that I've read up till now. I agree, we all have something which keeps us awake..

I like the phrase 'married to the darkness' it's like either you've accepted the ever present darkness in your life or else in a forced relationship with it..

This had me thinking many things. I can so relate. Deep write, Gullia! You know I love your work 😊

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Yes, it's the darkest one. Thank you so much, Yumna! I'm happy I'm not alone in the darkness haha. I.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

7 Years Ago

You're welcome, Gullia! Always a pleasure 😊
Beautiful. I wanted more of it...does it have a continuation?

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

Thank you! I don't know yet..
This is quite delicious the way the darkness seeps and wraps around you. We all have them, entertain them, sometimes facing them reveals something entirely different.
Nicely done G. R xo

Posted 7 Years Ago


Giulia King

7 Years Ago

So true! Thank you for reading, lovely :) xo

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