A very intensity is conveyed here. When you mention work in progress what to is you refer? I we reading the raw version and is there more rewrite in store? I have a very curious nature, lol.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
It's a work in progress because I'm thinking about making it a bit longer. And this is my first time.. read moreIt's a work in progress because I'm thinking about making it a bit longer. And this is my first time writing about something different. All my poems are about love, letting go.. This one is a bit darker lol.
7 Years Ago
So I'm anticipating My Demons Again the sequel. Because you know they never go away. The best we can.. read moreSo I'm anticipating My Demons Again the sequel. Because you know they never go away. The best we can do is push them down deeper, build higher and thicker walls so they are less likely to escape.
It's true re happy endings. I like 'words are like knives on my skin' and the sense of foreboding, mixed with what feels like a willingness to get on with things.
Something different in a very good way. Provocatively dark and an accurate portrayal of certain addictions. Sounds like the narrator is going through withdrawal. It's actually quite good with its relative intensity and the ending is nearly perfect.
Whether this is about heroin, cigarettes, alcohol, etc, it's a well-written poem about the "Demons" of substance abuse.
A very effective and somewhat bleak poem.
Nice work, King! :)
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
I'm so happy you like it! Although, I don't think I'll ever be as good as you. Your dark poems are a.. read moreI'm so happy you like it! Although, I don't think I'll ever be as good as you. Your dark poems are amazing. :)
7 Years Ago
Thank you! ;)
You may be correct, but your Love poems are far better than mine. I ex.. read moreThank you! ;)
You may be correct, but your Love poems are far better than mine. I excel in Darkness. ;)
You should just write several very dark poems and then you'd improve in that specific area. But some people can't because their mind isn't that dark.
A very dark piece coming from you, we all have demons that no matter how hard and fast we run, we can't escape them. This was nicely done and I loved the flow and format. :)
"We all might have something that keeps us wide awake at night,
keeps our thoughts running wild."
I think this is the darkest of your poems that I've read up till now. I agree, we all have something which keeps us awake..
I like the phrase 'married to the darkness' it's like either you've accepted the ever present darkness in your life or else in a forced relationship with it..
This had me thinking many things. I can so relate. Deep write, Gullia! You know I love your work 😊
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Yes, it's the darkest one. Thank you so much, Yumna! I'm happy I'm not alone in the darkness haha. I.. read moreYes, it's the darkest one. Thank you so much, Yumna! I'm happy I'm not alone in the darkness haha. I appreciate your review :)
This is quite delicious the way the darkness seeps and wraps around you. We all have them, entertain them, sometimes facing them reveals something entirely different.
Nicely done G. R xo