I think it nails loneliness Gullia.
It's not so much about being shunned - being cold-shouldered by society, as not feeling that one belongs in that same society.
And then being dragged back to it day and daily whilst knowing that just over the rainbow is a world of endless possibilities and our 'real' corner of the Earth.
It will connect to so many here, I feel.
Well done.
:)
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Great review, TJ! :) I'm happy that many can connect to these feelings. Makes me feel like I'm not a.. read moreGreat review, TJ! :) I'm happy that many can connect to these feelings. Makes me feel like I'm not alone :)
Guilla,
You have a good outline, I think more depth in explaining thoughts and feelings would make this poem more powerful. I like the premise, anyone who writes seriously understands loneliness.
Richie b
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
That's a good idea, Richie! I think this scribble is a work in progress. I will most definitely try .. read moreThat's a good idea, Richie! I think this scribble is a work in progress. I will most definitely try to explain my thoughts and feelings a bit more.
Gullia, you say this is not one of your best pieces, but there is tremendous potential in it.
I like the title to begin with and the sketch is tremendous. Just a suggestion, print off the sketch and the title and stick it on the fridge and see what develops.
The lady in black stands out as the 'poet of loneliness' but there's more to the story. I would like to know what it is.
Good luck.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you so much, Ted! I guess I'm just hard on myself. Too afraid to put something up here. I have.. read moreThank you so much, Ted! I guess I'm just hard on myself. Too afraid to put something up here. I have like a day or so to really think it through before I put it up here. Thank you for the encouraging words :)
I liked the similie like a broken flower...I can completely relate to this. It is true that writing helps us to overcome our grief. Thank you for sharing. It was truly inspiring.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
I'm happy I'm not alone with these feelings. Thank you for reading, Najam :)
Very beautiful gullia....
I could relate to it..
If I wrote this it would be more like ..
She would spent rest of her life in wonderland...than doing her normal routine chores...as there is no option she would spend nights and days scribbling about her dreams...lost in dream land...she is a poet of dreams ;)
I like the pic with the lady in black.. the black lipstick stands out :)
We all writers are dreamy souls... trying to find our true self in our writings..... pls. Keep writing I like reading your work....
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
I like it! Good job :) Thank you so much, it really means a lot to me
"She couldn’t decide which world she liked better.
The one her body was in,
or the one her mind liked to escape to once in awhile."
Sure you haven't written this about me? :P lol it feels as if I'm reading about myself ;)
It's beautiful yet kind of sad too. I would say these are musings of a restless soul (not an old one) ;)
I loved reading this, Gullia! I can so connect with all of this!
Great work :)
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
I'm happy you can connect with this poem, Yumna! It means I'm not alone :) I always appreciate your .. read moreI'm happy you can connect with this poem, Yumna! It means I'm not alone :) I always appreciate your reviews!