Magic

As I stand on the beach with my toes in the sand, 

I can feel the water slowly touching my feet,

I look up at the starry sky and wonder: 

"Death.. Why him?"

"I knew when I saw you, I saw magic. How can I not fall for pure magic?" 

I always think about you when things are going wrong. 

In the middle of the night when I hear the heavy raindrops falling down from a dark sky, 

I think of you.

I always find you in the darkest corners of my mind.

I find myself so torn in this repetitious, dull world.

I hug myself, trying to hold all the broken pieces together. 

These days without you feels like pure agony. 

The mere thought of being without you feels as dark as the sky. 

But then I start to remember.

All the flashbacks come running back. 

The good ones keep me sane.

And I find myself warm on a cold December day.

I feel my troubles drifting away with the wind.

I blink at a star far, far away, watching it as it blinks back at me.

"Thank you for guiding me..."

"...for guiding me to him."   

Reviews

[Jamey]

The toes in the sand sucked me right in..having done that many times...great lines in this one...

I always find you in the darkest corners of my mind.

"I knew when I saw you, I saw magic. How can I not fall for pure magic?"

Fantastic write!

[Giulia King]

Toes in the sand - is best thing ever.
Thank you so much! :)

[Anindita Janhabee]

Shows what one means by true love...
Even death is not the departure my dear... The close one, no matter the distance, remains close to the heart.......
Definitely emotional one....
You have got a way getting into my emotions....
Keep it up!!

[Giulia King]

You're right. Thank you for your lovely words!

[Jamieya B-Johnson]

A brave expression of emotion. You took me on a journey, great work.

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much for reading and for your review! :)

[Wondering Mind]

Magic of Love- this has hints of a spiritual, almost divine Love!

[Giulia King]

Spiritual love, I like that! :)

[ManasaC]

This poem talks about the agony of losing someone but also about the hope there will be a brighter day. Time is the best healer. A nice write, thank you for sharing

[Giulia King]

Exactly! :) Time is our best friend. Thank you!

[Evan M.]

Thank you... I've had some issues lately and this helps me think it'll be okay so thank you again for that

[Giulia King]

It takes time to forget things that are precious to our heart. Trust me, whatever it is that you're struggling through, it will get better. You just have to let it take time.

[MsJewel]

I can relate to your words having lost someone and finding peace walking on the shore or staring into the night sky. Your words are sad and lovely. Very well written.
Julie

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much for reading and for your lovely words!

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing and beautiful journey in your words.
"I feel my troubles drifting away with the wind.
I blink at a star far, far away, watching it as it blinks back at me.
"Thank you for guiding me..."
"...for guiding me to him." "
Sometime we need guidance and to be in the proper place. Thank you Gullia for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much for reading :) Always appreciated

[Coyote Poetry]

I love your work dear Gullia.

[Ashwin Shanker]

The author's note made a lot of sense :P ...
hehee kidding.
Actually, I would say that I can connect with each and every one of the lines individually as a thought. It is very relatable. And ultimately, we are all guided towards death. I liked how you have brought that across.

[Giulia King]

Haha, didn't like your joke! But thanks for reading :)

[ReedWrite]

You pulled your feelings together perfectly in this poem. It's beautiful...heart-wrenching...deep beyond measure.

I have a couple of suggestions:
All the flashbacks comes running back---> All the flashbacks come running back.
The good ones keeps me sane--> The good ones keep me sane.
And I find myself warm on a cold december day--> December should be capitalized.

On your last stanza...I suggest keeping the perspective 1st person. I think it will keep the reader connected to you on a stronger level.

I feel my troubles drifting away with the wind.
I blink at a star far, far away, watching as it blinks back at me.

All-in-all, my suggestions are just that...what you penned is certainly powerful enough without others mucking around in it and wanting to change it. I find, when you write something and its foundation comes from intense emotion...the finer elements of the write are irrelevant on the first few go a-rounds. It's only later we go back and refine the grammar and style and content. It's so much more important to capture the purity of the emotion on paper before time tempers it...and that is what you've done. It's beautiful in its simplicity...and poignant in its depth.

I think this line is just pure brilliance. It's my favorite: I hug myself, trying to hold all the broken pieces together.

Nicely done!

[Giulia King]

Thank you for your feedback! And thanks for pointing out the typos, I fixed it :) Exactly, I didn't even think about the grammar when I wrote this piece. Everything just came out.

[ReedWrite]

That, in my opinion, is the measure of a true artist. Too many people worry about the technical parts of writing, while they're putting the words down...and while the finished product might be structurally sound and even beautiful...it lacks depth. It doesn't have a soul. Your piece has a soul...all the rest after that are just easy fixes. :)

[Giulia King]

That's so true! Thank you so much for helping me :) I really appreciate your feeback and your lovely words