The Most Delicate Rose

"You deserve to be with someone who makes you happy." 

The earth started to shake. 

"You're the one that makes me happy", she said with a trembling voice. 

"I lost myself somewhere in your eyes, a sky full of stars. 

You're the most delicate rose in my life, but that rose doesn't open up anymore."  

He said, with tears in his eyes. 

She felt misunderstood and lonely.  

No one understands her mind.

No one understands her deepest and darkest secrets. 

No one thinks as deeply as she does, this will always be her tragedy.  

They misunderstood the most beautiful part of her body. 

She looks at him as a stranger. 

A million thoughts and memories of them are scored in her mind. 

All that is left is this goodbye.

"I will always love you", he said.

"You're the type of girl I will always have a thing for."

He turned his back against her and walked out. 

As the door closed she collapsed on the floor with her hands on her face.

She cried until there were no more tears left. 

We're made out of stars. 

A sense of acceptance washes over her and she started to 

pick up the broken pieces of her heart. 

Still mourning over what they could have been.

Author's Note

Just a late night scribble :)

Reviews

[ReedWrite]

Very nice.
I like the unconventional pacing...it adds to the sense of discord building, which is what you want with a piece like this. The reader takes the emotional journey with you.
I enjoyed this piece.

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much for taking your time to read and review it. It really means a lot to me :)

[Satoshi IroTzu]

Respect, Gullia King

I find this poem too literal. Give yourself a freedom and fly in the sky. In other words, take it to another level. I know you know how to because you did it in your previous poems.

[Giulia King]

Thank you for reading. I wrote that this is just a scribble. And I wanted to post something different which I'm glad I did

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This ain't a scribble! It describes the feelings and emotions of lost love amazingly! loved reading it!!

[Giulia King]

I feel that, as a writer you need to start to write in the middle of the night. So much rawness and pure love and emotions come out. Your pen just dances on the paper, waiting to be published :) thank you for your sweet words! This made me so happy :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I agree with you! And the pleasure was mine ☺

[Valentine]

All anyone has to give another is the best of themselves. If that is not enough then often it is best to go on. Valentine

[Giulia King]

I feel like on this piece, both of them gave much but aometimes people build up walls around them. True love breaks them down, other people find excuses to go.

[Tabby Mac]

LOVE THIS!! Scribble??!? I think not! There is passion, depth, and tons of emotion in this piece! I love the imagery! Well done!! Clap clap clap!!
Thank you for sharing!!
Tabby

[Giulia King]

Haha yes it's just a scribble! I feel like you can write about anything late at night, true feelings come out. Thank so much for reading Tabby and for your sweet words! It really means a lot to me :)

[Tabby Mac]

Well deserved!!

[Donyay Thomas]

i really like this a lot, you did an amazing job

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much for reading! :)