The Most Delicate Rose

"You deserve to be with someone who makes you happy." 

The earth started to shake. 

"You're the one that makes me happy", she said with a trembling voice. 

"I lost myself somewhere in your eyes, a sky full of stars. 

You're the most delicate rose in my life, but that rose doesn't open up anymore."  

He said, with tears in his eyes. 

She felt misunderstood and lonely.  

No one understands her mind.

No one understands her deepest and darkest secrets. 

No one thinks as deeply as she does, this will always be her tragedy.  

They misunderstood the most beautiful part of her body. 

She looks at him as a stranger. 

A million thoughts and memories of them are scored in her mind. 

All that is left is this goodbye.

"I will always love you", he said.

"You're the type of girl I will always have a thing for."

He turned his back against her and walked out. 

As the door closed she collapsed on the floor with her hands on her face.

She cried until there were no more tears left. 

We're made out of stars. 

A sense of acceptance washes over her and she started to 

pick up the broken pieces of her heart. 

Still mourning over what they could have been.

Author's Note

Just a late night scribble :)

Reviews

[Jamey]

This is very touching and emotional...full of great lines like:


"I lost myself somewhere in your eyes, a sky full of stars.
You're the most delicate rose in my life, but that rose doesn't open up anymore."
He said, with tears in his eyes.

We're made out of stars.
A sense of acceptance washes over her and she started to
pick up the broken pieces of her heart.
Still mourning over what they could have been.

Well done!

[Giulia King]

I'm so happy that you like my poem! Thank you for pointing out your favorite lines! I appreciate it :)

[The Realist]

'Started to pick up the broken pieces of her heart" damn this line had me. totally relate able even though a piece of your heart walks out the door we are left of a some what a shadow of our heart and yet still we have the will to pick up the remains of it and carry on. never forgetting but having the ability to slowing, yet painfully continue to love life and who comes with it.
This is such a beautiful 'scribble' Gullia King, keep up the good work.
The Realist

[Giulia King]

So true! Sad situations turn into beautiful poetry.. Thank you so much!

[The Realist]

you are very much welcome Gullia :)

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Sad and full of heartbreak. Many people do love someone in life but very rare love stories are successful. Very nice poem...

[Giulia King]

So true! Thank you so much

[Lizzy Morgan]

I can very well relate to this poem, it almost made me tear up. This is an amazing poem and you can tell a lot of thought was put into it. I enjoyed reading this!!

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much! I'm happy I'm not alone

[Winslow Des Totes]

Wow. This poem reverberates well in the mind as the imagery is so strong and intense one cannot help but feel as lost and betrayed as the narrator. :/ I'm sorry that person felt such immense pain but it gave the world this gem of a poem so it was tragically meant to be. Really great use of diction and a nice subtly the italics add; really makes the words stand out. Great job!

[Giulia King]

That really means alot to me! Thank you so much for reading and for your lovely words! :)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Beautiful story! I can see what was going in my mind so well. Tyfs!

[Giulia King]

I love that! Thank you so much :)

[PoeticSorcery]

it's like a sweet little story all on it's own.

[Giulia King]

Exactly! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Dear Gullia. A amazing poem.
"She cried until there were no more tears left.
We're made out of stars.
A sense of acceptance washes over her and she started to
pick up the broken pieces of her heart.
Still mourning over what they could have been."
The above lines are so true. What we didn't have or do. Break our hearts forever. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much for reading and for your kind words! They really are true and I'm glad others can relate to them :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome dear Gullia.

[Farah Husain]

beautiful.........I love the way it flows

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much for reading! :)

[aLittlePain]

Scribble huh? :) very nicely done! Uniquely angled write. Some lovely lyrical notes here. R xo

[Giulia King]

Late night scribbles are the best! So many thoughts and emotions come out :) Thank you so much for your kind words! Much appreciated. xo