A witch thirst

An impatience witch, ended up the forest life in two days.

Tonight, Georgia a witch that sucks the blood of her victim so well, is going for a hunt. Again she is in quest of her next victim from last some years. Her thirst for blood, provokes her to search a human, animal or any creature every single bit of her life. When she fails, she starts cursing herself for eating all the living creatures ghastly who used to be the a part of jungle, where she is alone now. Her condition is like a fisherman with his net, waiting to trap a fish from pond, where there is no fish. She becomes mad when feels hungry and thirsty. She starts tearing her black long curls, which seem, no combed since birth. Her hunger could not resist her to make bruises on her face by her long and untrimmed nails. Then, the blood from her bruises, quenches her thirst and hunger, which she licks by her long and green tongue impatiently. While licking, her fair complexion turns into red and she takes a long breath of relief.

But, do you think so, is enough for a deadly witch who swallowed and chewed millions of creatures in just two days? After a breath of satisfaction, she keeps on repeating the same thing when she feels hungry. Even, she is tired now by doing it every second. She sits with her saddest face by tree.

"Why do I have that bloody curse? I can't go outside for hunting" witch shouts and uproots the side grass and throws far, which she cliches into her fist.

"I should not do it, I should marry that vampire" Showed her regret. "If I had chosen a vampire, I would have lived a queen life instead of wandering for food. I had two options, either choose vampire to marry or live in jungle forever to enjoy the delicious flesh"

"I chose a jungle life where I finished everything in just two days" She looses her weight on tree trunk by supporting her head on trunk. She wraps herself around her arms. She stretches her legs on the earth and starts praying for prey.

Suddenly, she hears a leaves rustling sound as somebody is walking. She gets up as she got an energy drink. Her remorse changes into smile and excitement.

She walks slightly to keep her victim in safe zone to attack on. She peeps her head to see and finds a man who lost his way.

She feels very happy and now walks slightest.

"Nanny, Nanny, Nanny?
Did you sleep?"  A granny kept that story book aside on side table.

"Oh my God, You slept again, no worries, I will tell the further story tomorrow." Granny smiled and kissed Nanny, her grand daughter on her forehead. she did the blanket and removed her glasses on table. Then switched off side lamp light.

"Good night Nanny, Next story tomorrow" Granny smiled again and closed her eyes.

Author's Note

Kindly review it and guide me for better writing.

Reviews

[Srchaud]

I never like critquing someones english when its not there first lanaguge. I only speak 1 so any writer who tries to write in a 2nd 3rd 4th language deserves credit.
So instead ill give you some thoughts on the plot.
The ending was interesting did not expect that-although a tad crazy the granny is telling a child a story about flesh eating vampires(but whatever I like it).
-There was another interesting concept, the idea of a vampire who needs to eat alot and must either marry a vampire or devour the jungle life.
-there is potential for some conflict maybe even romance.
-however if this is a series of shortstories that the grandmother reads every night, then the ending felt cut off, as there was no resolution.
-if she is so upset that she is always hungry and must always hunt, why does one man make her happy? Wouldnt only help for a few hours?
-although this could use an editor to help strengthen your english, I can see some magic hidden within.
-A wild vampire with dirty matted hair is unlike all the vampires we see today. Its different and in a way charming.

[Gul]

Thank you so much for the feedback, Srchaud. Actually till now I got the reviews but rarely people tell you where to work and why.

I am grateful for this effort of yours. However, I would like to tell you that there are many types of ending, out of them one is,which ends with no ending.

You are one of the best supporters!!!

[Srchaud]

As an artist, you are allowed to paint the canvas how ever you please. You are right there is an ending with no ending. I always tell people to stick with there gut, if to you it is the right choice stand firm on that.
As for reviews in general,I always try to leave something for the writer. What worked what did not( in my opinion of course). I know the struggle,I care about writers, and want to see everyone be the best they can be.