Radio

Idk I wrote this at 4am but I like it.

Times running out

Listening to the radio

Waiting for my favorite

Tune

Please hurry up

Play the one song

Before my time

Runs out

Running around

The night

Praying for the distraction

Of my favorite song

Giving up

Turning the radio off

Leaning back

Staring at the sky

Feeling blue

Ready to call it quits

When a tune

Catches my ear

The beat

Of my favorite song

My heart beats faster

Dispelling the blue

This is the tune

That will save

My life time and time

Again

Running towards it

Seeking it out

Searching all night

Long

Finding the tune

Playing from the radio

On the ground

Next to a girl

Looking over at me

Not saying a word

I sit down

And relax

As we let the song

Wash away

All our problems

As the moon rises above

Happiness ensues

As we link hands

Over our favorite song

The only tune

That has saved our

Lives

Reviews

[DophinBloom]

This is a good poem,well done. I like the way you added a sort of suspense to the writing,ie
"Please hurry up
Play the one song
Before my time
Runs out"
This can make the reader ask themselves 'is she in danger? Why is her time going to run out?'
I think you can view this poem in lots of ways. You can think it is just about a simple song,that the girl/boy from the poem likes,or you can see it in the way that I think you intended,which was a deeper meaning,that maybe the girl is having a hard time and the only thing that will save her is this one song.

The only help I can give you is maybe add some punctuation to give more of a poetic feel and when using words like 'running' and 'finding',try and swap them for words like 'sprinting' or 'stumbling',ect.


Good effort and well done. Keep writing.