"Tears and Love"

The day I lost my heart

Was the day you left me stranded.

You left me alone in a cold world,

No love beside me, no hand to hold.

You vowed your love, but where are you now?

Off in some long distance,

Leaving tears imprinted in my soul.

It isn’t fair.

 

I live off the memories we had,

Though beautiful �"they haunt me.

The promises we made, never parting.

I must leave them behind now.

They are worthless to me.

I’ll make new memories,

I’ll learn to smile once again.

I’ll learn to leave this kind of love behind.

 

Someone new will mend my heart,

The sun has found me,

The clouds have let me be.

And when my heart meets its other half,

I’ll give them all of me.

Reviews

[Hope Rose]

Hey, cheer up. Things will get better for you, believe me(not meaning to sound like a counselor here, so sorry if I sound like it lol). It may be hard now, but just pick something that makes you happy and enjoy it like there's nothing that is better. Words from someone who's been there, it works. If you ever want, or need, to talk, just message me. I'll help you through whatever it is troubling you, or I'll be the person you can rant to. Believe me when I say that I will be here, and I know there are more people who will be here as well. Just giving yourself hope, as you do in this poem, is a really good start. I hope things have gotten better for you. If not, just keep your chin up, the sun will prevail over the darkness. Keep up the good work with your writing. It's definitely nice to read. And, hey. Smile :)

[Rachael Lea]

This is very sad, Very nicely written. Optimistic thoughts can get us through usually I like that you went through through the process of healing throughout in a way. Only the person to mend your heart should be you.

[Carolynn]

Heartbreaking - I've been there so I relate - be patient and never lose hope - something will happen when you least expect it :)

[Weeping willow]

Wow! very lovely write,love the feelings in this write;-]

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I like the optimistic ending--it's nice to see a poem like this end on a positive note, with the realization that we eventually have to move forward. You could maybe improve this by adding more figurative language, but I like the straightforwardness of it too. Sometimes poems can be really mystifying with so much open to interpretation, and while that can be interesting, there's a lot to be said for a poem that makes it message clear also.

[trainwreck]

I live off the memories we had,
Though beautiful, they haunt me.

Those lines are just perfect. The last stanza is one of the best on this topic I've read on this site. Excellent job!

[Blood_knight3000]

brilliant.

[Rae]

Beautiful. Keep writing!

[Cherry Lai^_^♥~~]

Sweet and sad...

Keep writing beautiful poems...

[TheElfPrincess]

Sweet and sad, with a good ending, nice flow and lovely description. It was a great poem and I believe sometimes relatable.

[Tasha]

I loved this! It was so sweet and sad at the same time. I also loved how you have been able to heal from it with a positive ending. This was fantastic.
♥ Ta'Shandra