Cold Eyes

No longer the person I once knew

Lost but still
Crying for change but always smiling in the place you hate

Pleasure outweighs the guilt

Dying little by little when looking in those eyes
Searching for a hint of the one I once was

Reviews

[Bear]

Critique: (Pleasure out weighs the guilt) outweighs

Review: With growth comes change, sadly that growth sometimes is in a different direction, so growing up can also mean growing apart. Your poem does a good job of highlighting the reality of this situation. Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[JayceeC]

No relationship can stay static. It has to change and meld as the people change. Sometimes that happens in a cohesive way and sometimes it is in two totally different ways. Sounds like the latter has happened here. Fortunately the human heart ha a huge capacity to love, and move on.

[Scheherazade]

This was deep and short and simple and powerful. A good and enjoyable read.

[wordman]

so i wish i could be the one you used to see

[Weeping willow]

Struggling through change is very hard,nicely expressed;-]

[Neha Sharma]

Such potent emotion! Meticulous introspection leads to this disturbed epiphany.
A concisely strong write! Keep writing. :)

[richieb]

Gregory, a very thought provoking poem. We all look in the mirror at one time or another, soul searching and self examining. The reasons are different but instinctively we know what we are capable of as a human being. Thank you for an insightful write. Richie B.

[Queen Ceeza]

this really makes me think!
"Searching for a hint of the one I once was"
I love it!

[dan]

Gregory, this reads like someone who has done a self-assessment concerning his relationship with a lover and found himself lacking, a lesser person than he was and should still be. In relationships there is always the danger of taking one's lover for granted...all the little things that one had done in the beginning to make her happy, surprised and content. When one realizes his shortcomings he will feel shame, guilt and self-loathing. You captured all of the twisted emotional baggage, and did so in a very brief write. That takes talent, of which you have plenty. take care...dan

[Sami Khalil]

"looking in those eyes
Searching for a hint of the one I once was"

A cold reality indeed. Thank you for sharing...:)..................

[Spencer Barker]

Gregory, I believe we all have had times in our lives in which we question the very role and status of our existence. You make that very relatable in this poem. Truly great writing!