Cold Eyes

No longer the person I once knew

Lost but still
Crying for change but always smiling in the place you hate

Pleasure outweighs the guilt

Dying little by little when looking in those eyes
Searching for a hint of the one I once was

Reviews

[Bear]

Critique: (Pleasure out weighs the guilt) outweighs

Review: With growth comes change, sadly that growth sometimes is in a different direction, so growing up can also mean growing apart. Your poem does a good job of highlighting the reality of this situation. Bravo! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Diane]

I tend to lose my self from time to time. Its a struggle to find our self again.

[zunie frost]

great job !!
nice piece of work my friend

[J.R. Turner]

I really enjoyed this poem. I like how simple it is yet it carries a huge message and struggle that tons of people go through every day.

[Veronica Staehle]

Well captured- feels like staring in the mirror and seeing a stranger reflecting, and all the feelings that come with that.

[Hyacinth]

Short, sweet and beautiful. What more do you want?

[Zyle Christian William ..]

wow! This was nicely written!

[DaVoid]

Simple poem.
Creates a sense of being lost in me.
The poem ends with an open ending it seems. Still searching..Keeps the reader wondering. great.

[Ian Faraway]

Growing up is like an uphill battle. The enemy is yourself. Those around you influence your life, sure, but ultimately you have to fight the person you are to become the person you want to be. It's hard, especially when you grow cold to the point of not even being able to recognize yourself. Great poem, it's short and to the point but it still packs that punch. Keep writing! -Ian

[Emily]

I really liked it!
Very short, but yet has a lot to say.
Keep it up!!

[MandaBear]

You can really feel the ice coldness (puns lol) of this poem. You really did a great job showing the emotions of sometimes loosing yourself and not really knowing what you have become. Great job. Your poem inspired me. =) Great job