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Your luck is half chance, so is everybody elses

Im pulled in your direction
Opposing yet still attractive
Youve gathered just enough room,
for me to stay

mind lacking stability
Yet, you still have will in me
I cant help but to be pulled in,
Such natural positivity

Eager to rebel
I break right through my shell
decending from orbit
I make my way to peace

I have weighed the pros and cons
Ive found balance in neutrons
So so to speak
Our feeling are mutual

Its so profound
As I circle around
Awaiting my time
For us to form a compound

But there awaits a challenge
An unballanced valence
I couldnt have been the only one
Someone has taken my place

Reviews

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

A very beautiful and scientific- rather chemical- poem. Your comparison of yourself to an electron is nice and the way comparison runs throughout your poem is even more wonderful.
Then, you talk about luck, what if another electron- another person- succeeds instead of you. It highlights the importance of luck and gets the reader thinking- it moved me quite well.
Good use of scientific terms and good use of rhyming at some places.
Well-written and keep writing.