Away With The

My heart is on fire,

I pull you inside.

Does love last forever?

I cannot decide.

 

Heartache, heartbreak,

love torments me so.

Daybreak, I wake,

when will I let go?

 

You make

me ache

tears pour out my eyes,

I wake,

It’s fake,

I say my goodbyes.

 

I know

It’s low,

my heart skipped a beat.

But know,

love goes

when it's not complete.

Reviews

[Steve]

lots of POWER here.....

[hannahspelledbackwards]

Ahhh i love the last two lines, "Love goes when it's not complete"
So true! I love reading your poems, they always are stuff i go through :)

[OT]

another great poem!! the flow is spot on - it all ripples through very well!! carefully placed words lends to its appeal - nice!

[Siddhartha]

Perfect. The metre is perfect, the rhyming divine and not a single word seems out of place...A poem that is written from the heart and moulded by the mind...

[Jim Parson]

Are you trying to make me cry now? Okay, I'm growing weary of telling you what perfect meter and rhyming you have. Can you post something with at least one word out of place so I can point and shout AHA!

[Nothing Personal]

Really good writing..Love your flow and your final conclusion :-)

[Moflo]

Oh wow I love your pacing! You really do have immaculate rhythm in all your poems and you have great rhymes. What else is there to say? Fantastic writing, as usual!