Heat of the Moment

I wrote this when I was with someone who treated me badly and I was trying to convince myself that it was going to be okay...once he changed.

I feel so empty,
I’ve broken in two
This hurt I’m revealing,
is hard to construe

Ripped into pieces,
bloody and slashed
Silent and suffering,
from a heart you have smashed

Beat up and busted,
but with you I’m alive
Killing me softly,
but for now I survive

Can’t live without you,
I’ve fallen too soon
Infesting my veins,
although I am immune

Pulling me closer,
holding me down
Heartbeat to heartbeat,
there’s no one around

Passion provided,
movements and thrusts
Pleasing me softly,
as my body adjusts

The bruises within me
are easy to hide,
together for always,
I’m right by your side.

Author's Note

David Nevue - Ascending with Angels | Upload Music

Reviews

[Ashley Myers]

youre great with rhyme and rythm. you do well with ABCB Stanzas. you should also try some ABAB. expiriment a little with your rhyming its really good

[Moflo]

Very nicely written. The flow is perfect and I can definitely feel the emotion you are conveying. Great job, as usual.

[Jim Parson]

There's no accounting for love. It doesn't care whether it's good for you or not. You've captured that very well here, just as you always do. But it should be a beautiful thing, so stop going after the bad boys!