In the wind

Sometimes if you listen
closely enough,
you might hear
the whispers of my story
on the breeze
in the song of birds

Reviews

[Relic]

In my story the birds crap on me. :) I like your story better.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Those birds are the awfullest gossips. One was mocking me just this morning. ;) I love the sound of wind through the trees though, like it's whispering hush to the birdsong and chatter of squirrels in the branches. In truth, I love the birdsong too. Such a quaint and cozy poem, I enjoyed.

[Thomas W Case]

Tremendous power in this brevity. A complete landscape with just a few brush strokes.

[emmajoygreen]

Beautifully, gently brief but - loud enough to hear.

[W. Barrett Munn]

No doubt you have the instincts of a poet to use brevity and there is a quality here not unlike chinese prosody translated by Pound. I wish though for some kind of hint or suggestion of the metaphorical connection between your story and the songs of birds.

Winston

[D. Mansfield]

with all the noise in the world today getting to hear the simple things like the wind is getting harder and harder. I love the poem, thanks for sharing your writing

[Chris Shaw]

I like the whispers of a gentle wind. Far kinder than those of a gale. I also like this piece of brevity. Nicely conveyed.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

A wonderful poem written Green. If we listen to the wind. We can learn many things. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote