Fine

Today

I’m fine

It’s fine

It’s all okay

We’re playing with glass

But surprised when it breaks

Head strong

Heart strong

It’s all just a game

 

Author's Note

Feedback?
Work in progress.

Reviews

[Marcus Sergiu David]

Another sincere piece of work. I live the attitude in this one. This one actually sounds really nice too (read out lout). Keep it up!

[pinhead07]

Nice, simple, strong. The repetition, as pointed out, works. "We’re playing with glass. But surprised when it breaks." Loved it.

[Shannon]

This is well done, simple but strong. The repetition really works, too. I tend to read pieces like this out loud and have a few wording suggestions if you are interested.

[Robert Parlange]

Nice metaphor about the fragility of human beings. We harder we become, the more we shatter. Nice work.

[several thousand]

"We’re playing with glass
But surprised when it breaks" Very well put metaphor Green. I like it.
This poem reminded me of lyrics by Avicii "Life's a game made for everyone and love is the prize"