Swirling Leaves

From a prompt

The music screams into her ears

Drowning out any thoughts she might have had

hiding in her head

It was autumn

And it was beautiful

With the leaves swirling around

A multicolored chaos against her green hoodie

But today, the sun was hiding

And the wind was blowing

And it was very cold

But the music sang a different tune

And all she could bother wondering about

Was what it would feel like to have

Leaves in her hair

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[...Relic...]

There's different ways to look at this because inferring something can make a reader think. The different music could be her intrusive thoughts. The hoodie is on her head which denotes hiding perhaps.

But then the music in winter changes so she looks back at autumn with its leaves freely moving about wondering. But it's too late so she imagines.

Just my take. Interesting poem.

[Stephen]

This is a beautiful poem. I like your style and the message that you bring through your writing.

[Delmar Cooper]

I think it is direct and to the point and well done. Unaffected is the term I'm looking for.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Charming, Green.
A delightful offering!

[Lauren]

This is so pretty! I love the imagery. It reminds me of days when I was still in public school and it was cold out and how I had my headphones in and was just in my own world. It makes me kind of nostalgic. Haha. I love it!

(PS. I was looking at your profile and we live really close to each other! Crazy.)

[icelandicblue]

This is lovely. I was struck by this image:

A multicolored chaos against her green hoodie- that was a wonderful image to show your reader the richness of the moment.

I also liked the ending which felt very wistful to me.

[Chloe Grant]

Oh my do I adore this. The last part gave me chills... It reminds me of a teenage girl. It's something people can really relate to. It's awesome.

[Jamie]

Brilliant piece of poetry! It reminds me of lord of the rings with the autumn feel to it and the green colours (maybe that's just me lol) A pleasure to read :)

[Sadiesmiles]

Brilliant work. I love the description you use when saying "A multicolored chaos against her green hoodie." Keep up the good work!

[Laura Lynn]

I think it would be lovely to have leaves in ones hair; it could make a nice statement, or even a jewelery or hair piece which has a leaf motif, those are nice as well, makes one look and feel like a princess and gives others something to enjoy looking at, there is no sense not dressing up once in a while and giving thanks for the way fashion can be to make a person valuable and feel so, to jazz up an otherwise dull scene especially