That Voice Inside Your Head

Dear _______,

I am just a

VOICE

inside your head

as you read this letter.

That's all I am.

You can try to read it like you think I would.

Putting all the

inflections where I would.

Trying to give it

that 'thing' that was

distinctly me.

But it doesn't fit right anymore

does it?

Because all I am now

Is that voice inside your head

That can only

SOUND

like me

as you read this letter.

Sincerely,

__________

Author's Note

Feedback?

Reviews

[MadScientist]

A really insightful look into a part of ourselves that we take for granted. Love how you left a blank space for anyone's name to be inserted. That it could be anyone's inner voice talking.

[Ace St. Jean]

Interesting poem, love the creepiness and message that it holds.

[Chris]

Nice submission. This poem has a very rhythmic layout which makes reading this poem easy. Good job conveying the after lying thoughts a person may feel after a break up, or loss of friend with their voice still in the back of their head, possibly hinting at regret.

[C. Lee Battaglia]

Awesome job! it was very cute and nice! I liked the __'s it makes me stop and think…
I see great potential!

C. Lee Battaglia

[steven sundell]

Very clever. Interesting choice of perspective. Also, nice continuity with the way you began w/ dear ______& ended w/sincerely_______..

[C. Rose]

The "You can try to..." line sticks out quite far.
The lines that end in "would" felt awkwardly close together like you were about to start rhyming.

Random thought. The voice that read this letter to me - whose is it? I wasn't thinking of anyone in particular but it sounded slightly British.

[Persona]

An interesting idea. I like the unique way in which you think.

[John Anderson]

This is such beautiful heart-felt piece that left me with a sigh!

[MAD ENGLISHMAN]

Clever little poem.
Well done

[Roger Turgeon]

Sounds like our struggle as authors...to convey in writing and still impart the same meaning as we do in person. What made you write this? A voice inside your head? ( : O )