A Sneaking Suspicion

Ever had a guy like you? Ever wish he would stop?

You are so inconspicuous,

Standing in an army guy's

Camouflaged jacket

As you press your back against

A bright white wall.

No one would ever know you were there -

Not one of the thirty people who sit

Directly in front of you.

Your silent, depressing face

Doesn't drag any attention to you -

Not at all.

Nor would anyone notice you

Inching your way into my view

And attempting to play the song I used to play

On the piano all the time.

And then when you finish butchering that,

You would play the songs we'd sing,

Fiddle with the pendant 'round your neck -

A copy of the one I'd bought myself -

And stare at me.

But no one notices;

You're just so incredibly sneaky

When you turn one-hundred and eighty degrees in your seat

To watch me from up close.

You are totally inconspicuous

When you all-out stare.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think this means. I want to see if I portrayed this well enough.

Open to any and all suggestions.

Reviews

[Leigh]

He's inconspicuous, but you notice him, right? you notice him because he is annoying you? but he is waring you down and you are beginning to like him? I cant actually tell its a bit of a contradiction~~ Or is this how it works, forgive me I'm just a guy. Great write though love your style

[Roque]

Very well written. These guy's are something else, we all know one of them. And I thought you did a good job of making the reader feel sorry for him, yet at the same time you make him /repulsive.

[Mockingbird]

this brings to mind a man stalking his ex-lover. the last stanza confirmed this for me. nice piece.

[William F. Whaley]

I like how this came out. Reminds me of someone having a crush on the 'mysterious' guy in high school; she sees through his too-cool attitude, but still has a soft spot for him.

[Kyle]

What does this mean? Hmmm. I think it mean a guy is checking you out and really wants you to know it. And you kinda like the attention. Am i right?

[Eagle Cruagh]

None of the reviews revealed a thing.
First Par.
Guy in army jacket standing by a plain wall--- nothing there.
Second:: 30 people sit in front of your blank face.
Third: This appears to be someone who is bewitched by you.
Plays songs he heard you play.
Fourth:
Sorry . It seems to me that you are seeing yourself the way you
think others see you----- dull, not inspired, watching your every move
hoping that no one will notice you , blending into the woodwork.
I do not believe this is like you , but you may think so.
This is an inspired poem, well written, articulate, intelligent.
Good writing .
------ John

[Seshat Nidaba]

This is quite haunting, and feels like a scene either from memory or a bad movie. I did enjoy the intensity of it, the realism of emotional inequality of the inherent situation, as if the female does not consider the male courtship worthy or something?

[SkinlessFrank]

Gives me the creeps to read your lines about someone like that, someone we all know and would rather forget, but can't. Or maybe it's us in our worst moments that you've captured.

[end of..]

made me chuckle

[rt farris]

i like poems that take ordinary moments and show their extra-ordinariness. your poem hits the mark for me. it could be a jilted lover or a feeble-minded stalker or even a silly boy with a crush. All to be perhaps pitied but not feared. Too many news pieces take a serious violent episode and make it the norm. your poem has shown us otherwise.