Evan's Speech ';'

Evan is eleven and this is his speech

(NOTE: Evan is my 11 year old grandson and this is the speech he wrote for a contest. He is the winner in his class and will continue on in the competition. 

This is making him a wee bit anxious...

But hey ...WTG Evan!)

THE STORY OF EARTH

Yawn. Oh look. Dinosaurs are evolving again. Just wait. 5, 4,3,2,1 and, boom all the dino`s are gone again. Do you know exactly how boring re-living your life a million times is? What? Never had that happen to you before? Well, it’s a long story, so I’ll simplify it for you. I’m just another planet in the infinitely expanding universe. I like to call myself Earth, and this is the pre-history history of me. 



Billions of years ago. when I was only a mid-sized meteor. my life was pretty boring. I thought it would be like that forever, but like a lot of the time, I was dead wrong. You may think that being a meteor is cool and all, but the fad back then was to be a planet with life. Of course you know that you need water for life, so when I saw a comet flying by, I snagged his tail and flung him into a developing planet. Then, I hit that planet and poof I’m a planet with water, and potentially life.



It would take millions of years to tell you about the many animals that came to be, but the species that affected nature the most were the homo-sapiens, or man. At first they were kind of cute, but then they started drilling into my face for oil and fossil fuels to burn. That stuff smells horrible, but that’s not the point. And in what seemed like only years later, they used it all up and the entire polar ice cap melted and flooded my surface except for the modern day globe.



Only a couple hundred thousand humans were left. They took refuge on mountains and made makeshift shelters and art including the Easter island heads, Stonehenge and the city of Atlantis. Atlantis was once a huge city buzzing with activity but was flooded when the polar ice caps melted. Like I said before, I’m usually wrong about things, and when I thought all the craziness was over, I noticed a dark spot slowly forming on my friend the sun. I know that stars these days have some pretty crazy fashion statements but this was different. I asked him what it was, but he didn’t know. It slowly got bigger and bigger and bigger until in a split second, it opened up and the sun collapsed in on itself and created something no-one had ever seen before, a wormhole.



Only me, mars and mercury were taken in to the wormhole. It closed up behind us and the sun went super-nova. We were transported back in time to when the planets were forming. We all hit our past-selves and pushed them into space. At this time all the planets were being formed so it didn’t really matter that they were gone. The last of the humans re-populated the planet and were again the dominant species. Some times I wonder why only me, mars and mercury were taken in. One thing I know for sure, I’m pretty lucky to have such an action-packed life. Oh. Look at the time. It’s almost the sun’s due date when we are transported back. Wait. Where’s mars and mercury? And where’s the wormhole? Oh planetoid. And like I said before, my life is pretty action packed and always evolving, in good ways and bad. Apparently this is the end of my story and me so this is…The End. Or is it? (Dun Dun Dun)

Reviews

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

This is axing! Kudos to Evan!!! I posted a pie of my son's work here too. The peer reviews were so darn kind. Hey Evan! Awesome. Way to make boring old history fun!

[Gray Witch]

I will be sure to show this to him Monday morning. He came in third and did an awesome job!

[Gray Witch]

Evan is delighted with all the positive comments. Now all he has to do is say his speech again but this time in front of the whole school ...dun,da, dun, da.... (LOL)

[icelandicblue]

I enjoyed this very much Evan. You've got a great entertaining beginning, a very logical story flow, fabulous descriptions and the possibility of a sequel. The thing that stuck out the most for me is that you have Voice in your writing which is really hard to teach! Good for you and thanks for a beautifully written story.

[CecilA]

Brilliant, Evan! I couldn't stop reading it to catch my breath. Great writing.

It's well thought out too. I love the whole thing.

Your ending "Apparently this is the end of my story and me so this is...The End. Or is it? (Dun Dun Dun)" is wonderful.

Congratulations on winning your class contest and I wish you well in the upcoming competition. "You are pretty lucky to have such an action-packed life." Just like planet Earth.

Thank you for sharing your speech with us.

Sincerely,

Cecil

[Samuel Dickens]

Bravo, Evan! This is so very clever and imaginative. I'm sure you're not a bit proud of him.

[Gray Witch]

LOL...I told him he has an innate 'style' and should be very proud of his talent.

[Samuel Dickens]

Indeed.