Angelic glimpse

Yesterday I saw a girl..and this is all about her...

I bet she wasn't from this world..
With moon lit face and curled hair.
She resembles the angle,which I heard in my grandma's stories,
Or she may have some magical theories..
Which keeps her apart from others..

Author's Note

Pls give your honest feedback...so that I can improve my skills:)

Reviews

[Nerio]

Hi Govind,
I believe this poem is more likely a fragment of a poem, since it proposes a beautiful vision of an angelic being, but without giving more details about. You verses focuse only on the descriptive part, struggling to rapresent what is 'not of this world' into human Language. I appreciated the way you pictured this astonishing creature, exactly how does 'ancient poets' used to be back in the early XII century (I refer to poets such as Alighieri or Petrarca, famous european poets of the middle age, who described women as angelic and superior being). You share this deep feeling of attraction, yet of suspension (your angel indeed is 'apart from others', then also from the poet himself).
Interesting but I believe you have not expressed your true potential yet. If I may give you a suggestion, why don't you try to express the inner/spiritual relation of the poet toward this beautiful creature? At last it could move the reader to a deeper empathy.
Regarding the style, I wonder if you were trying to follow a specific metric or else you arranged the verses freely, following your true inspiration. I would try and shorten the third verse of at last a couple of syllables in order to adapt a 6-7 syllables for each verse structure.

In short: Gentle words for a gentle poem. I hope you will make it longer.
Best regards

[STORIES BEHIND EYES]

Its a good start and one sees what you written but then it stops cause the imagination ends and leave reader hanging. Give a good beautiful continuation of the poem and where else it could lead to. When i read someones poem or any work I visualize what I'm reading and it makes it very captivating and when the ending leaves u hanging but in a good way I'm like man that was good omg what could've happened ha ha. . helps a reader engage in what u written. I try writing my work as how I love reading others stories or poetry. Keep it up you have good talent hun 🙂🤗🤗

[Fatima]

So much written in such short words, really like this and all the angelic descriptions...beautiful!!

[Eiram]

This is cute and lovely poem.Falling for someone and wanting to know her/his better is one of the happiest moment that would happen to a human.sorry my grammar is bad😝.

[Govind singh]

Thank you so much for stopping by and reading..I appreciate your time and words.and it's ok about grammar;)