To be among the rest.

This poem is for one of my frnd..who thinks that he is unable to do anything in his life..I hope u got it wat I mean..don't give up!!

I'm lack of talent so i'm scared inside,
I feel weak to control the bridle of my life,
I'm so incompetent that keeps me isolate from the rest,
Then i asked myself
Can't i be the best?

I may be blunderous,
But it doesn't mean ,
That i'm useless,
It means m crude,
However its better than be rude..

Ther is something bulky at the bottom of my heart,
I can feel it,
But unable to utter it...


But now, i suffered a lot,
That driven me to catapault,
From worst to best,
To be among the rest.....

Author's Note

Kindly leave your reviews and suggestion so I can improve my writing:)

Reviews

[Lav]

To live life fully is to go inside, to your heart. Discover the voice within.

[Govind singh]

True..thnk u so mch

[Stella Armour]

The aim is not to "be the best" , but to be the best you can be for yourself not for other people.

Everything comes with time, so be patient, enjoy each day and learn to love yourself

[Govind singh]

Thnk u so mch mam for Ur precious tym and beautiful words..

[RW Erskine]

you got it my friend, keep it going

[Govind singh]

Thnk u sir...means a lot..btw Ur profile pic looks like undertaker...:)..no offense

[RW Erskine]

you just never know, do you

[Great Aunt Astri]

Very good! There are some little errors, but probably, in you English (English is very different in different parts of the world) it would be considered correct. I would not want to change any of it, because it would alter the 'flow' of the poem. I am just so glad that the chap in the poem has found what to do with that 'something bulky at the bottom of his heart', and I hope the catapult puts him right among the best! I look forward to reading more of your poems!

[Govind singh]

Thnk u so mch for your time and review..I'm glad you enjoyed.

[Great Aunt Astri]

You are welcome.

[barleygirl]

This is a truthful poem about how it is to have feelings of being inadequate . . . you used some unusual words to describe this situation ("bridle of my life" . . . "may be blunderous") . . . adding to the originality of your writing. Then your message slowly turns into a more positive direction without sounding too "rah! rah!" like a cheerleader (that kind of inspirational writing sounds like a pep talk & it's not too comfortable to take in for a person who's down). Your upbeat comments are gentle & sparse, like a small nudge to see things in a more positive way. I find most people who are down prefer a message like this, which doesn't find fault with being down, just trying to encourage a little (((HUGS))) Fondly Margie

[Govind singh]

Thnk u barleygirl for Ur precious tym and beautiful words...I have been waiting for Ur honest reviews...thnks a lot..

[Malvika]

Feeling useless and incapable is a feeling we all go through at some point and you have nicely written all these emotions I really liked the poem .

[Govind singh]

Thnk u so mch Malliska.i appreciate Ur comments.we should never loose hopes and hopes are only produce by ones hard working.thnk u once again..

[Gaia Octavia]

Isn't it interesting how we all feel terrified that we are not enough (whether we realize it or not), yet that fear makes us feel so undeniably alone?

I absolutely LOVE your line 'There is something bulky at the bottom of my heart' (the last e is missing from the word 'there' by the way 😁 I do things like that all the time)

Well done, keep writing!

[Govind singh]

Thnk you Gaia for Ur kind reviews..Ur words brought a big smile on my face...thnks a lot

[lightsong]

many young people struggle finding their paths just like Your friend, it may stay with them even after they grow up, specially if they don't get the support they need, and the attention from their families, it may lead them to low self confidence and esteem, what You did here is to be understanding and give faith and courage to Your friend, he needs it, as he needs to hear Your words to him, telling him that the road always lead to something, and like him, many are still walking in that road with all its ups and downs, I'm sure since he is Your age and Your friend, he feels more comfortable with You, You are a good caring friend well done.

[Govind singh]

Thnk u so mch light..,
For Ur reviews that r so right.
I appreciate Ur comment,
And I will surely snd Ur msg to my frnd...
Thnks a lot.

[Sami Khalil]

Structure and message are great and leave many good impressions on minds and souls. Very uplifting to your friend and us. Keep it up.

[Govind singh]

Thnk u sir...I appreciate Ur kind words...thnks for Ur precious tym

[Sami Khalil]

You are very welcome.

[Sarah Wilson]

Wow! Love this! I like the sudden shift in attitude. This is beautifully written

[Govind singh]

Ahhh... finally...waited for this review;)...thnks Sarah...means a lot