All about last night.

Last night I had a dream this poem is all about that..

Last night it was all about me and you,
In the dim light of the candles,
With curtains blue..
Last night it was all about me and you,
With all your favourite stuffs,
That I knew..
The way you were perfumed,
Drove me crazy,
Further,
I bent on my knees holding your hand,
Our eyes met and our smile renew,
Last night it was all about me and you.
You said nothing but I must had to,
If it's a dream then let me sleep for the rest of my life,
Because it's miserable without you,
Last night it was all about me and you...

Author's Note

Just started writing..so go easy guys and suggest me so I can improve it.

Reviews

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Beautiful night that was and such it must be to express our innermost feelings- being open honest truthful to ourselves and the other person involved- I believe the truth the heart speaks brings down many walks and prevents much confusion- lovely poem🌹

[Govind singh]

Thank you so mch for your time...I appreciate your time and review:))

[¿]

Great! Very less can describe so well what they've seen last night in dream.........
Wonderful flow and rhyming!

[Govind singh]

Thnk u so mch tahsin... means a lot:)

[Malvika]

The poem perfectly depicts the excitement, eagerness and love one feels after they meet the one. :)!

[Govind singh]

Thnk u so mch...love:)

[Pash]

I've had one of these moments before. You described it beautifully. I'm there! It has flow! I enjoyed this one a lot.
DB

[Govind singh]

Thnk u so mch sir for your time and for Ur precious thoughts.

[Donna]

For someone just starting writing, your doing a great job!

[Govind singh]

Thnk u so mch for Ur precious tym and beautiful words..

[Einstein Noodle]

captured dream ...who would want to wake up from this one ;) the repetition works ... its not over-worked in my opinion ..the rhyming here and there adds strength ...i really like this line about the "stuff":
" With all your favourite stuffs," ;) you might consider another way to say "Further" ... it seems out of place and takes me out of the mood of love .... i was able to read this with pauses where you meant to create them easily... not necessary to read again ..but i like the feelings of love and enchantment of dreams, both real and unreal, so i read it again :)
E.

[Govind singh]

Thnks for Ur precious tym and review...I will surely work on ur suggestion..;)

[AYVID N]

A well executed poem. The power of repetition is well brought out here.

[Govind singh]

Thnk u Divya.

[John Ciarmello]

"I'm the dim light of the candles." I am such a Hugh fan of your Imagery Govind. I enjoyed this again and I hope for your sake it was not a dream. Best Wishes!

[Govind singh]

Getting review from one of my fav poet on this site..no thing can make me more happy than this..thnks a lot...

[John Ciarmello]

You are so welcome! You have IT!

[Lydia Shutter]

When your dreams are of the one you love, you never want to wake up. So romantic and sweet. So honest. I liked it a lot. Lydi**

[Govind singh]

Thnk u so much for Ur precious time and for Ur kind words.

[Coyote Poetry]

Soft, realistic words and wonderful use of words. I liked the honest tone and hopeful ending. Thank you for sharing the amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote

[Govind singh]

Thnk u so much for Ur precious time and Ur for Ur precious words..

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.