A Moment So Informal

A quick poem I wrote. Enjoy!

A Moment So Informal:

The whirlpool casted water away much quicker than it had come,

I had spent more than enough time here. Yes, more and then some.

The hair on my legs ceased to mimic the seaweed off the coast,

And I lost the weightlessness, equivalent to a midnight's ghost.

Reality had been set back into motion, the world turning once more,

as I wrapped a towel around my waist and saw something I'm sure.

Beyond the glaze of the foggy mirror a beige figure did appear,

What lied beyond that curtain of steam I felt I'd deeply fear.

I raised a hand and wiped the water concealing my reflection,

How strange I thought, "I do see me but I can't make a connection."

And with this meeting of uncertainty and a moment so informal,

I wondered how something could feel so dark but on the outside look so normal.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I’m not 100% sure I’m reading your poem the way you intended the message to read. But here’s the way it sounds to me – the narrator feels pretty terrible in his/her own skin, so he/she is looking into the mirror & having a tug-of-war head trip over it. Many people feel very ugly but then are surprised to see a photo or a glimpse in the mirror, which reveals that he/she is not ugly at all. You’ve made this simple moment of dysmorphia into an artful encounter with the steamy mirror. “Not being able to make the connection” -- a brilliant way to wrap up this confusing encounter where you SHOW instead of tell what this dysfunction feels like (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Nicholas Duboe]

I love your interpretation. I felt writing this that people may conceive it in different ways and I love your comment. Thank you for reading!

[Riddhi]

Actually this poem reminded me of Sylvia Plath's poem 'mirror'..I liked the way you expressed yourself..I liked the last line especially..The way you described that man hair on his legs to seaweed , his frail figure to any ghost..I liked that..Overall , an interesting poem..
Keep writing..

[Nicholas Duboe]

Thank you! I appreciate you taking the time to read some of my work!