Forever More

Forever More

A Poem by Nicholas Duboe
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I sort of dark love poem. I hope you like it! (By the way I got married March 7th so, yay for me!)

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Forever More


The dawn had broke as it had broken before,

While I sat still against the door,

My eyes to the window, I watched birds soar

And I sat still forever more.


The dusk had fell as it had fallen before,

While I sat still against the door,

My eyes to the window, I watched rain pour,

And I sat still forever more.


I sat still against the door as I had sat in days before,

My eyes to the window, I watched, what for?

For you my dear, forever more.

© 2015 Nicholas Duboe


Author's Note

Nicholas Duboe
Feel free to let me know what you think!

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thanks for entry into my poetry romantic competition still going through entries
loved the way you used forever more in your poem.
beautiful love poem sad

Posted 6 Years Ago


Wow this is truly beautiful in a heartbreaking painful way but I love this piece

Posted 9 Years Ago


Well done, you kept the meter constant through the three verses, and I see you corrected the one little error mentioned in an earlier review. I appreciate that when the author fixes suggestions.
OK, one more suggestion. Instead of sitting still against the door all day long, get up, clean the house, make a nice dinner, open a bottle of wine and set a nice table for your dear. They would probably appreciate that more than someone that "sat still forever more." : )

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is an amazing poem, I absolutely loved it!

In verse 1 of stanza 3 you have written "I sat still against the door as I has sat in days before". I believe this should be "I sat still against the door as I [had] sat in days before".

Otherwise an impeccable piece

~Ri

Posted 9 Years Ago


A deserving contest winner! You've captured so artfully that sense of longing and made the reader feel it. This has a songlike feel to it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


that was very beautiful work, i loved the feeling of longing and waiting for that someone.
well done :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Congratulations on winning the Need Reviews? V contest!

A very beautiful poem, a thoroughly enjoyed it! Well done :)

-Mila

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is really beautiful ♡

Posted 9 Years Ago


Nicholas Duboe

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much!
Happy belated Wedding Anniversary G.
This reminded me of the story of Hatciko - a powerfully moving story of devotion.
Just like this.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Nicholas Duboe

9 Years Ago

Thank you!!
This is so beautiful.. waiting for someone from dusk till dawn. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Nicholas Duboe

9 Years Ago

So glad you liked it!

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Added on March 9, 2015
Last Updated on April 1, 2015
Tags: Poem, Poetry, GothikahLIVE, Love, Dark, Romance

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Nicholas Duboe
Nicholas Duboe

Bowie, TX



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Hello there, my username is a pen name to be honest but I am currently 26 years old. I am a husband, a father and a son. I am also a poet and attempting novelist. I began writing years ago using Books.. more..

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